Do you agree or disagree with this sentence? the opinions of celebrities such as famous person entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people.
The question is whether the opinions of celebrities such as famous person entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people or not. In my vantage point, this belief definitely dominates on society and youth who are intrigued of famous people. My arguments and reasons are listed below which will strengthen my point of view:
First of all, nowadays, young people look for obtaining the fame; hence famous people can be a superior choice for them. Having high income, setting on the main cover of the magazines and being well-known for majority of people and so on, are the strongest philosophies to young generation admire famous people rather than ordinary people.
Second, youth are usually inclined to a modern life. Their preference is the last version any car, the luxurious houses with modern furniture. To their belief is that all of these facilities improve quality of living. It may be true; however there are a lot of other worthwhile things in the world that have spiritual effects on our life like kindness or learning from the past mistakes and etc. Since a young person’s mind is into his eyes, it will not be astounding that the approach of famous people’s life is preferred to ordinary people by young people.
Third, it goes without saying that traveling, discovering the awesome parts of the world and doing marvelous things and so on can attract youths’ consideration instead of watching a usual life or doing routine things. It is obvious that younger people are endeavoring to access such a life; naturally older people’s experiences will not be effective in their view.
As I have illustrated, new generation want to create a different world from their parents, consequently getting idea from famous people’s life can be the best solution for them in this way.
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and youth who are intrigued of
and youths who are intrigued of
Second, youth are usually inclined
Second, youths are usually inclined
is the last version any car,
is the last version of any car,
To their belief is that all of these facilities improve quality of living.
To their belief, it is all of these facilities that improve the quality of living.
flaws:
The fourth paragraph is off the topic.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 18 in 30
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 4 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 12 15
No. of Words: 306 350
No. of Characters: 1488 1500
No. of Different Words: 174 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.182 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.863 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.578 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 112 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 74 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 53 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 34 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 25.5 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 13.961 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.583 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.36 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.589 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.102 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 388, Rule ID: AND_ETC[1]
Message: Use simply 'etc.'.
Suggestion: etc.
...ness or learning from the past mistakes and etc. Since a young person's mind is int...
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Discourse Markers used:
['consequently', 'first', 'hence', 'however', 'if', 'look', 'may', 'second', 'so', 'then', 'third', 'well', 'while', 'such as', 'first of all']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.242937853107 0.229887763892 106% => OK
Verbs: 0.138418079096 0.158761421928 87% => OK
Adjectives: 0.124293785311 0.0866891130778 143% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0395480225989 0.046263068375 85% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0480225988701 0.0685040099705 70% => OK
Prepositions: 0.124293785311 0.118717715034 105% => OK
Participles: 0.0508474576271 0.0351676179071 145% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.77449248245 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0225988700565 0.0309702414327 73% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0762711864407 0.0887237588012 86% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0197740112994 0.0209618222197 94% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00847457627119 0.0139019557991 61% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1859.0 2387.08602151 78% => OK
No of words: 306.0 408.028673835 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.07516339869 5.86048508987 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18244613648 4.48200974243 93% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.372549019608 0.338922669872 110% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.267973856209 0.251872472559 106% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.179738562092 0.174417080927 103% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.133986928105 0.112833075102 119% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77449248245 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 212.727598566 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.578431372549 0.524397521467 110% => OK
Word variations: 62.6598637272 59.2087087015 106% => OK
How many sentences: 12.0 20.6684587814 58% => OK
Sentence length: 25.5 20.5533526081 124% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.7889749164 48.84282405 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 154.916666667 120.699889404 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.5 20.5533526081 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.25 0.644075263715 194% => Less Discourse Markers wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.54480286738 18% => OK
Readability: 52.2973856209 45.7405998639 114% => OK
Elegance: 1.85 1.45489161554 127% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.462106834927 0.300154397459 154% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.117424659509 0.103427244359 114% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0576587282593 0.0752933317313 77% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.603841148474 0.497263757937 121% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.187507277053 0.151897553556 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.201513592257 0.114077575197 177% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.170285674268 0.0781384742642 218% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.311208627156 0.336927656856 92% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0924861358322 0.067059652881 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.283600165253 0.210909579961 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.144816238323 0.0618886996521 234% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8870967742 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.86379928315 52% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.91756272401 41% => OK
Positive topic words: 6.0 8.42114695341 71% => OK
Negative topic words: 2.0 2.4623655914 81% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 2.75985663082 36% => OK
Total topic words: 9.0 13.6433691756 66% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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