Do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Some people say that technology has some bad effects on children's creativity.
One of the tangible signs of modern life is the development of technology which we sense it clearly in the last decads. we know that today children face technology products that did not occurr in the past time. I think modern life which is mixed with technology, has some bad effects on children's creativity. I will expand this idea below.
First, children's hobbies were very diverse in the past time. Since there were not modern various means, children had to entertain themselves with simple different tools which everybody could access them. To play with some handmade playthings, they had to think and make use of their hands in addition to their eyes. this made their creativity to be strong. Moreover, most of the children got out of the home to join their friends because they used to play in groups. they learned new things with each other which is impossible in single plays. For instance, the children of my generation could build playthings with woods like a treehouse. In contrast with the past, today each child has a tablet, mobile phone, and pc and they just stay at home and play the new generation of games lonely.
Second, if there was a question for a child, he/she has had to read some books or ask it from others then put the signs together in order to find his/her answer. most of the times they may found much additional information and they could activate their brain ability to relate different matters together and got much information from a simple question. But now google make it easy. just typing your question, then you can find your answer in a twinkle of an eye without reading books and getting extra information. Here technology makes children lazy and it prevents their brain to work properly. When children don't make use of their brains, their ability to thinking will be weak and this affects their creativity.
As I said above, technology has some bad effects on children's creativity by making them play lonely and less varied kinds of games(which is restricted to electronic games) and also by less activating their brain ability to find their question by just typing it and get their response directly without any extra information.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, moreover, second, so, then, for instance, i think, in addition, in contrast
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1831.0 1977.66487455 93% => OK
No of words: 374.0 407.700716846 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.89572192513 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3976220399 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.45927247462 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.53743315508 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 537.3 618.680645161 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.8490256047 48.9658058833 132% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.3684210526 100.406767564 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.6842105263 20.6045352989 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.36842105263 5.45110844103 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 5.5376344086 217% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.196696895164 0.236089414692 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0651731088417 0.076458572812 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0645341602621 0.0737576698707 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.136834922388 0.150856017488 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0514109803087 0.0645574589148 80% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 11.7677419355 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 58.1214874552 119% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.1575268817 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.14 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.37 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 86.8835125448 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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