do you agree or disagree young adult are not helping their community
Some people think that young adult not helping the community. People believe that young adult are busy by their world, like the internet, the social media and the television. Although I understand their point of view, I believe that young adult benefit the community in many different ways socially and educationally.
From the social perspective, young people are more social active than old people. Young people are more technologically advanced. If they will subjected to help their community, they will do that it the best way. For example, if young people are asked to help their community to clean the town or plant more trees, they will surf the internet to find the best ways for making their community beautiful. Also young adult are able to gather more information quickly as they are more advanced in using the computers and internet than old people, so they will have the ability to search for the perfect ideas. And they will do that faster than old people. Even though that young adult are some time seems to be less interesting in helping their community, they are the best among all ages. That is why I think that young people are able to help their community as they are technologically advanced.
It is also very important to remember that young people are more progressive in their education. Thanks to the educational system today, which allow most of our new generation advance din their education. Most of the students today are graduated from collages. If those educated young people allowed to help their community, they will benefit the community and the whole society with their high education level. For example, if a teacher asked to help the children of hid community how to read and write, he will use the best ways he learned in college to help them. On the other hand , if ask an old person retied from work to help those children how to write and read, he will do that just because he has free time, but he will not do it he best way as the sane as an educated young teacher. Because of that I think that young adult helping their community in more educational way.
In conclusion, for the reasons I mentioned above I think the young adult help their community. I believe that young adult are more social active as they are more aware with the new technology. Young adult are more educated which allow them to serve the community in a better way.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, for example, i think, in conclusion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 57.0 43.0788530466 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2002.0 1977.66487455 101% => OK
No of words: 426.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.69953051643 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54310108192 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.44339860282 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 212.727598566 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.403755868545 0.524837075471 77% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 626.4 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.5100919907 48.9658058833 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.3333333333 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2857142857 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.47619047619 5.45110844103 64% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 5.5376344086 217% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.36266561878 0.236089414692 154% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.1523162647 0.076458572812 199% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0869233919861 0.0737576698707 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.278703646635 0.150856017488 185% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0157710295337 0.0645574589148 24% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.98 10.9000537634 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.85 8.01818996416 85% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 86.8835125448 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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