Do you agree or dsagree that it is better to work for business owned by someone else than to work for the business of one’s own family?
In my opinion, I believe that working for the business of one’s own family is far more better than working for someone else for numerous reasons such as, financial independence, better economic conditions and continues work flow.
Work in bussiness and economical conditions need a lot of expert and knowledge that related to person’s filed of study. Someone who works in their own business has a lot of opportunity such as financial independence and independence in duties. Family business is a example of this kind of business. For example my grandfather has own business. He had been worked in Metalogy and metal forming business several years ago. When he retired from his work, h gave our family business to my father and several years later, my father will transfer own family business to me.with this hierarchical orde we could save and defiance our business. By that explanations, independence in work is great opportunity for us.
When somebody try to start their own bussiness, maybe it gains a better economics conditions. For example in It world startups are such a great model of that business. These innovotive companies have a lot of innovotion in their work plans that can bring ous many benefites in any field of our life such as mobiles,tablets,computers,cars and ext..
By this great ideas, the better economics conditions could be gain. Many of the great Ceo’s of that startups such as Tweeter,Facebook,Apple are become billoner because they have clear vision and great innovotion about business and economics. Steve Jobs,former Ceo of Apple company is a great example of that definition.
In 20th centrury,the age of the financial crisis, owing and running family business can cause continues work flow because in this shrinkage era, with this shaking economy, many people loose their work. But when someone has their own business that means need not to work for other people and that casue continues work flow.
In conclution, working for own or in family business have a lot of opportunity such as above examples and detalis that I mentioned besid if we want to stable our economics, we must change our business model to family business model.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 88, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'better' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: better
...usiness of one's own family is far more better than working for someone else for numer...
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Line 3, column 23, Rule ID: ECONOMICAL_ECONOMIC[1]
Message: Did you mean 'economic' (=connected with economy)?
Suggestion: economic
...inues work flow. Work in bussiness and economical conditions need a lot of expert and kno...
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Line 3, column 268, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...ependence in duties. Family business is a example of this kind of business. For e...
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Line 4, column 15, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'somebody' must be used with a third-person verb: 'tries'.
Suggestion: tries
...reat opportunity for us. When somebody try to start their own bussiness, maybe it ...
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Line 4, column 314, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , tablets
...in any field of our life such as mobiles,tablets,computers,cars and ext.. By this great...
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Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , cars
...r life such as mobiles,tablets,computers,cars and ext.. By this great ideas, the bet...
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Line 4, column 345, Rule ID: DOUBLE_PUNCTUATION
Message: Two consecutive dots
Suggestion: .
...s mobiles,tablets,computers,cars and ext.. By this great ideas, the better econom...
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Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , Facebook
...'s of that startups such as Tweeter,Facebook,Apple are become billoner because they ...
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Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , former
...about business and economics. Steve Jobs,former Ceo of Apple company is a great example...
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Line 6, column 17, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , the
...le of that definition. In 20th centrury,the age of the financial crisis, owing and ...
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Line 6, column 185, Rule ID: LOOSE_LOSE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'lose' (= miss, waste, suffer the loss etc.)?
Suggestion: lose
... with this shaking economy, many people loose their work. But when someone has their ...
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Line 6, column 262, Rule ID: NEEDNT_TO_DO_AND_DONT_NEED_DO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'work'?
Suggestion: work
... their own business that means need not to work for other people and that casue continu...
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Line 7, column 233, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...usiness model to family business model.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, may, so, for example, kind of, such as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1835.0 1977.66487455 93% => OK
No of words: 358.0 407.700716846 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.12569832402 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34981470047 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.16168173462 2.67179642975 118% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 212.727598566 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.486033519553 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 585.0 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Interrogative: 2.0 0.994623655914 201% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 63.7204100539 48.9658058833 130% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.941176471 100.406767564 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0588235294 20.6045352989 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.64705882353 5.45110844103 67% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.53405017921 132% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 13.0 5.5376344086 235% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.467200618531 0.236089414692 198% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.162008172003 0.076458572812 212% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.132887886561 0.0737576698707 180% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.274599229556 0.150856017488 182% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.163900395391 0.0645574589148 254% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 11.7677419355 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.47 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.68 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 86.8835125448 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.