Does being a successful person is to earm a lot of money?
Today’s society is greatly influenced by money. No doubt money is the ultimate goal or course of action, but often people are inclined to believe that to be successful is to earn a good annual package or earn a hefty amount of money. But, according to me, money cannot be an indicator of success. I have mainly two major reasons to substantiate my view point which I will be discussing in the following paragraphs.
First, success is a tangible thing, which cannot be touched but can be felt. To elucidate, we cannot associate success with money, because success is a feeling that can be only felt. Hence, this feeling can be subjective and vary from individual to individual. For instance, for some people to earn money is success while for others it may not the case. Others might consider a success to accomplish different objectives may it be related to its research, passion or to do something for needy. As long as they are able to achieve their goals, they consider themselves to be successful. Many musicians, artist, teachers, NGO worker or social workers, they might not earn a lot but still believe themselves as successful.
Second, success has nothing to do with money you earn, rather, it has a lot to do with whether or not we have given our life a meaning. One effective way to measure success is to keep a track of your progress. Those who know that if they are heading to a right path and making progress, you are a successful person. My personal experience is a good case in a point, I had been working for nearly ten years on the different ways to control diseases on chickpea; till now I have discovered two important ways to deal with problem. Achievements of my research is a great success for me, as I am able to contribute to a part to help and improvise my nation.
In conclusion, I reaffirm my opinion that in order to gain success, you need not access lots of money instead success is a feeling of personal satisfaction, and if you can achieve that satisfaction and happiness, then you are successful in your life. So, due to aforementioned reasons, I believe that money should not be considered as a criteria for evaluating success.
- Some people believe that it is an important part of a child s education to go on field trips such as museums Others think that children should spend time learning in a classroom at school Which view do you agree with 70
- Ethanol as an alternative to petroleum 78
- The government should spend money on university education or on the education of young children 76
- Old people enjoy their life less than younger generations 76
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement Because today s world is so busy and crowded we should not expect people to be polite to one another 83
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 88, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
...u earn, rather, it has a lot to do with whether or not we have given our life a meaning. One e...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 596, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... is a great success for me, as I am able to contribute to a part to help and impr...
^^
Line 4, column 335, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a criterion' or simply 'criteria'?
Suggestion: a criterion; criteria
... that money should not be considered as a criteria for evaluating success.
^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, hence, if, may, second, so, still, then, while, for instance, in conclusion, no doubt
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 15.1003584229 172% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1783.0 1977.66487455 90% => OK
No of words: 384.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.64322916667 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4267276788 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78376403035 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 212.727598566 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.526041666667 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 560.7 618.680645161 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.0129492154 48.9658058833 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.0555555556 100.406767564 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.3333333333 20.6045352989 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.38888888889 5.45110844103 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.368161772655 0.236089414692 156% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.122737946265 0.076458572812 161% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0699274361946 0.0737576698707 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.246246024225 0.150856017488 163% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0494093766356 0.0645574589148 77% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 11.7677419355 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.63 10.9000537634 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.13 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 86.8835125448 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
---------------------
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.