Educating children is a more difficult task today than it was in the past. they spend so much time on cell phone, online game, and social networking.
Nowadays, rarely can we find the childrens taht do not use cell phone or new technological devices. These so much spending time will affect the childrens' education and studey. Children are so busy with their cell phones. Also, the social networking fills out their mind and they cannot concentrate on their study similar to the past time. These points will be clarified in following paragraphs.
First and foremost, students spend so much time on their cell phonen to play and use many new attractive applications. Also, everybody knows that the time is limited and nobody does not have infinite time. Consequently, spending so much time on the internet or social networking is made that students do not have time to study their lessons. For instance, when one student spends hours on the internet in a day, he or she will not have any other times for doing his or her homeworks. Thus, students are affected by using these new technologies and it just waste their time. Thereby, they just have another time for sleeping and eating their daily lunches and dinners.
Secondly, using the cell phone with its many new applications and new online games, fills out the children's minds and consequently they cannot abale to concentrate on their educations and their teachers' study. When a child starts to play a new game, he or she really wants to complete that game. Therefore, all of his or her concentration will be on the finishing the game and reaching the final goals of the game. Moreover, statistics have shown that many games fill the children's mind and playing too much with the games can affect their healthy lives. However, we could not find these many cell phones and new online games in the past, and children wducation was more easier than now.
In conclusion, by coming the new technologies and social networking, many children cannot concentrate on their study and their lessons similar to the past, and it have effects on the their educations in these days.
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- parents do not have enough time to spend with their children. That is the best to use that time doing things that are related to schoolwork. 60
- Educating children is a more difficult task today than it was in the past. they spend so much time on cell phone, online game, and social networking. 60
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'pastime'?
Suggestion: pastime
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Suggestion: easier
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Suggestion: has
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, first, however, if, moreover, really, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, for instance, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 24.0 13.8261648746 174% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 52.1666666667 61% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1642.0 1977.66487455 83% => OK
No of words: 336.0 407.700716846 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.8869047619 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28139028586 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54516320216 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 161.0 212.727598566 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.479166666667 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 496.8 618.680645161 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.7539215579 48.9658058833 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.5882352941 100.406767564 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7647058824 20.6045352989 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.29411764706 5.45110844103 134% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.331368551423 0.236089414692 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.119819456883 0.076458572812 157% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0786432317186 0.0737576698707 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.207355425004 0.150856017488 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0631362045324 0.0645574589148 98% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 11.7677419355 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.08 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.73 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 86.8835125448 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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