As everything in life is like a coin that has two different sides, people must weigh the pros and cons before the jump to the conclusions. Making a decision is the most important thing in our life. Even though some people adamantly believe that there is no big difference to make a decision between now and past, I agree that today young people tend to make a choice without parents influence for following reason.
The first exquisite reason that makes me hold this belief is most country prefer democratic system, so that it has impacted people's perspective so far. However, in the past, people could not conflict with their parents because of the socialist. For example, my friend who is intelligent and have a ability to studying abroad got a pregnant from his boyfriend. Of course, her parents never allow to have a baby when her smart daughter were young. However, my friend postponed to study and now she had a baby. In my opinion, democratic system influences her decision because when my grandmother got a pregnant when she was 16 years old, her mother took a medicine and gave her without my grandma's permission.
Secondly, another word deserving some words here is nowadays teenagers can choose their majority, even though their parents restrict their decision. On the other hand, in the past people tended to follow parents guide, especially when it comes to make a decision about major. My personal experience will explore this idea. I had chosen my major which is environmental engineering before my father told me that I have to become a teacher. Even though my dad wanted that way, I never consider about becoming a teacher and I'm happy about my choice. Nevertheless, my grandfather influenced my father when he tried to choose his profession which was a doctor. Although he has been working at a hospital for twenty years, I don;t think that he is feeling satisfy his job.
In a nutshell, contemplating aforementioned paragraphs today youths are able to make a choice independently. However, our parents are the most crucial people in family, we have create own fate in order to live happily and without regret.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... is no big difference to make a decision between now and past, I agree that today...
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Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
..., my friend who is intelligent and have a ability to studying abroad got a pregna...
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Suggestion: I'm
...r consider about becoming a teacher and Im happy about my choice. Nevertheless, my...
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Suggestion:
... profession which was a doctor. Although he has been working at a hospital for tw...
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Message: Use past participle here: 'created'.
Suggestion: created
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, for example, of course, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 52.1666666667 75% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1769.0 1977.66487455 89% => OK
No of words: 363.0 407.700716846 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.87327823691 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3649236973 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70116338786 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.578512396694 0.524837075471 110% => OK
syllable_count: 554.4 618.680645161 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.7805193927 48.9658058833 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.2777777778 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1666666667 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.22222222222 5.45110844103 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.253619090678 0.236089414692 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0817535563033 0.076458572812 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0917804712864 0.0737576698707 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.164609383721 0.150856017488 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0731171695524 0.0645574589148 113% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.76 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 86.8835125448 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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