Essay topics: TPO 45- independent writing taskDo you agree or disagree with the following statement?In the past, young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them; today young people are better able to make decisions about their o

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Essay topics: TPO 45- independent writing task

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?

In the past, young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them; today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives.

Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

I absolutely agree with this argument because some spacial reason. It can be seen in different nations with remarkably different culture which this fact is incredibly true. As we can see the structure of the family, society rules and individual thinking have been changed magnificently. So I will infer this claim by presenting of this causes in some circumstances.

The first point I would like to make is the structure of the family. As a sort of the fact, by evolutionary effects on the nations the number of the families relatively have been reschedules in all around the worlds. This change is caused the family be more smaller than the past and it make the young people to think differently from the old time. Furthermore, these young ones want to choose their individual choices. And this fact, by decreasing of the children in one house has been more important and it replaced to one feature of the individuality and inherently of the young person to do their work independently.

The second point that I'd like to make is that the society stucture in the educational part have benn change remarkebly. It has been widespread in different part of the country and is more accessable for low income group of the society. By this event more people can think more independently and more critically which is caused the any one want to choose any their disired things in every aspect of their life from religous, to very low important decision like what he/she want to eat.

Finally, I think there is one thing that have had always a very crucial and marvelous effect on every aspect of the evolutionary process in the history,is the economy. By this point of view, as one of the economy 's consequences, I think by increasing of the income per-capita in nations and letting to go to work individually by the young person in this process, we can see very novel matters. As this matter, we can mention to more financial independency between young children of the family. Because in the past we can see that the most of the work was family base and agricultural, so, the young person in the family must do that works which the father or family ordered to him or her and the earning of this effords was not for the young man directly. While, in the modern situation we can see that the young person must to go to their indivitual work in very low ages and they can have their own money which help them to be more confident rather than the same age person in the past.

Conclusively, this is very important that the people in the family and the politician and government be awarded about this incredibly important and crucial fact in the society to have a better and more plesuare and effective choices.

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Average: 7 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 332, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
... will infer this claim by presenting of this causes in some circumstances. The fi...
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Line 3, column 254, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'smaller' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: smaller
...ds. This change is caused the family be more smaller than the past and it make the young peo...
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Line 3, column 288, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'makes'?
Suggestion: makes
...ly be more smaller than the past and it make the young people to think differently f...
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Line 5, column 23, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: I'd
...ndependently. The second point that Id like to make is that the society stuctu...
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Line 5, column 332, Rule ID: ANY_BODY[1]
Message: Did you mean 'anyone'?
Suggestion: anyone
...and more critically which is caused the any one want to choose any their disired things...
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Line 5, column 473, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'she' must be used with a third-person verb: 'wants'.
Suggestion: wants
...low important decision like what he/she want to eat. Finally, I think there is on...
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Line 7, column 152, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , is
... the evolutionary process in the history,is the economy. By this point of view, as ...
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Line 7, column 821, Rule ID: MUST_HAVE_TO[1]
Message: After 'must', the verb is used without 'to'. Probably, you should use 'must' or 'have to' here.
Suggestion: must; have to
...uation we can see that the young person must to go to their indivitual work in very low...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, furthermore, if, second, so, while, i think, sort of

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 74.0 52.1666666667 142% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2233.0 1977.66487455 113% => OK
No of words: 478.0 407.700716846 117% => OK
Chars per words: 4.67154811715 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67581127817 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67265207218 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 212.727598566 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.422594142259 0.524837075471 81% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 719.1 618.680645161 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 65.7594991495 48.9658058833 134% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.055555556 100.406767564 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.5555555556 20.6045352989 129% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.77777777778 5.45110844103 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.1575618666 0.236089414692 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.054841472894 0.076458572812 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0434223598312 0.0737576698707 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0927589499028 0.150856017488 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0435890948448 0.0645574589148 68% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 11.7677419355 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.1 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.8 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 86.8835125448 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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