The government should control the amount of violence in films and on television in order to decrease the level of violent crimes in the society. Do you agree or disagree?

Youth violence is a booming social problem nowadays. Regardless of whether it requires the government intervention or not, it has to be dealt with utmost care. Some people holds the opinion that government should regulate the media because it allegedly promotes violence through films and television. In my viewpoint, government’s regulation would not be the only solution to this problem.Below are the following reasons which support my stand.

Firstly, mass media through films and television perhaps contains the bits which can spread violence among the youth but simultaneously these shows teach us many good personality traits. For instance, I reside in India and here Bollywood movies are quite famous. Few months back, URI movie was released. It had a patriotic genre and was based on the Surgical Strike conducted by India in 2016 as the aftermath of the terrorist attacks which took away the lives of innocent civilians. This movie had a lot of violence, coercion and illegal techniques. But alongside it also instilled the feeling of patriotism among the people watching it. The movie had a lot to teach. I taught us the meaning of team spirit, hard work and determination. Moreover, it was considered revolutionary movie of the era. Therefore, putting the restrictions on such prominent movies will not be helpful.

Secondly, since this is an era of internet and technology, it would be very difficult for the government to put regulations on everything. Even if they censor the mass media, it would be cumbersome to put a check on internet usage of anyone. It is nevertheless duty of the parents to have control on their children. They should observe and scrutinize the activities of them starting from the childhood so that their children don’t end up doing some misdeed. It is the values that parents teach them during the adolescence which stays with them forever. For instance, recently there was a game blue whale on android, it had many stages which ultimately brings the player to suicide. It was a sort of brain washer game challenging the young youth to play till end. Many teens lost their lives due to this. Hence, this was not the media which was at fault but this time it was the apks at the android store. Therefore, to curb such things parents should be the watcher of their children then only such things can become controllable.

To sum up, only government intervention would not serve the purpose but concurrently the parents and society also have to step forward to shape the youth. Furthermore, if government can control only the media but not the internet and other social sites. Hence the youth should become themselves responsible about what is right and wrong.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, hence, if, moreover, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, still, then, therefore, as to, for instance, sort of, in my view, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.0752688172 211% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2268.0 1977.66487455 115% => OK
No of words: 450.0 407.700716846 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.04 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.6057793516 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80632794648 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 245.0 212.727598566 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.544444444444 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 683.1 618.680645161 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.4842260997 48.9658058833 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.0 100.406767564 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.6666666667 20.6045352989 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.37037037037 5.45110844103 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 3.85842293907 285% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0965404859571 0.236089414692 41% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0247683558707 0.076458572812 32% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0352030326958 0.0737576698707 48% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0685991289724 0.150856017488 45% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0347627342957 0.0645574589148 54% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 11.7677419355 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.66 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.18 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 86.8835125448 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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