Moreover, in this approach all of the expenses such as the money government will spend on athletics will return to the society in a short time. For instance, the first and most powerful man in Olympic 2008, 'Hossein Rezazadeh', helped to his home country so much. Around 2004, Iranian government tried to invest money to cultivate his secrete talents. It took only four years. But, when he was elected as the most powerful man, all people around the world came to Iran to visit his home town and imported plenty on currency which is one the most substantial parts of the economies. What's more, the government announced that more than twice of the investment came into the country in a short period of time (six month). Therefore, this example has clearly illustrated how an athletic can provide a lot of opportunities to his country.
Finally, athletes will be known as the sample of societies and regular people tried severely to imitate them. This is a place where most of the expenses in healthcare would diminish. For instance in my country, a lot of people wanted to be as strong as 'Rezazadeh' and this conclude to a fabulous result. Indeed, based on the government announcement, the expenses of government in healthcare was lessen to half of its origin. Therefore, the health of whole society will be reduced by true investment.
All in all, as the above-mentioned examples have illustrated, it is valuable to invest money on athletics. Not only does it help to increase the popularity of the whole society but also it increases the government budget and health of people.
- TPO 30 – Integrated 86
- To improve the quality of education, universities should spend more money on salaries for university professors. 60
- Some people believe that government funding of the arts is necessary to ensure that the arts can flourish and be available to all people. Others believe that government funding of the arts threatens the integrity of the arts.Write a response in which you 66
- TPO 03: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?It is more important to keep your old friends than it is to make new friends. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 66
- Some people believe that success in life comes from taking risks or chances. Others believe that success results from careful planning. In your opinion, what does success come from? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 70
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 28, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
Moreover, in this approach all of the expenses such as the money government w...
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Line 1, column 581, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: What's
...ost substantial parts of the economies. Whats more, the government announced that mor...
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Line 1, column 690, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...stment came into the country in a short period of time six month. Therefore, this example has ...
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Line 1, column 709, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'month' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'months'.
Suggestion: months
...e country in a short period of time six month. Therefore, this example has clearly il...
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Line 3, column 395, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'lessened'.
Suggestion: lessened
...xpenses of government in healthcare was lessen to half of its origin. Therefore, the h...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, moreover, so, therefore, for instance, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 43.0788530466 39% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1312.0 1977.66487455 66% => OK
No of words: 270.0 407.700716846 66% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.85925925926 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.05360046442 4.48103885553 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74702982137 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 153.0 212.727598566 72% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.566666666667 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 413.1 618.680645161 67% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.6690389732 48.9658058833 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.7142857143 100.406767564 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2857142857 20.6045352989 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.21428571429 5.45110844103 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.53405017921 66% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.137329444013 0.236089414692 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0444008301296 0.076458572812 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.050443439557 0.0737576698707 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0812979989805 0.150856017488 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0492848073878 0.0645574589148 76% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 11.7677419355 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.38 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 86.8835125448 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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