Governments should spend more money in support of arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams.
Considering the significant importance of exercises, I do believe that it is better for government to spend more money in support of athletics rather than the arts. The reasons to support my viewpoint are elaborated on in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, by supporting of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams, numerous people will motivate to exercise and having healthy lifestyle. To be more specific, nowadays, individuals are overwhelmed with various issues in their lives, and they are less concern about their health. Moreover, considerable number of people have financial problems to join sport clubs or gyms. In this regard, if people become aware that they do not need to pay money for using facilities in the gyms, they will encourage to allocate some parts of their time for having regular exercises. Consequently, having regular exercise based on the researchers claims, which have been published in various well-known journals, have significant impacts on humans' health and longevity. Although some people prefer to participate in artistic activities rather than sports, number of these people in compare to those who interested in sports are fewer.
Moreover, supporting the athletics issues will enhance a country's reputation in world. To put it in other words, every country are striving to use their efforts to become excellent in every aspects such as communication with other countries, technology, and sport, to name but three in order to become a well-known and repudiated in world. In this regard, spending money on sports can be a effective way and it will lead to great results rather than spending on the arts matters. An example can shed some light on this issue. Consider a government provides a high-tech facilities and prestigious coach for its football team. In this case, in the world wide match the mentioned team can show great performance. Therefore, if the mentioned teams win most of its match, every win that gain by team will increase the familiarity of people all around the world with country.
In conclusion, contemplating all the mentioned reasons and examples, I think spending money on athletics matters are efficacious rather than supporting the art.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'allocating'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'encourage' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: allocating
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Suggestion: humans'; human's
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Suggestion: an
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Suggestion: worldwide
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, if, moreover, so, therefore, well, i think, in conclusion, such as, in other words, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 43.0788530466 56% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1867.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 354.0 407.700716846 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.27401129944 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33761313653 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89072366645 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.545197740113 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 574.2 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.94265232975 223% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.1926508397 48.9658058833 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.6875 100.406767564 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.125 20.6045352989 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.25 5.45110844103 133% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.273623216405 0.236089414692 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.090754224017 0.076458572812 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.113395279393 0.0737576698707 154% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.20817882131 0.150856017488 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0903316977205 0.0645574589148 140% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 11.7677419355 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 10.9000537634 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.43 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 86.8835125448 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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