Governments should spend more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams.
Governments play an indispensable role in a society that sometimes lead to big changes or huge thriving. There are various categories in a nation which some of them need their governments aid in order to be successful; the art section is one of them. Therefore, as far as I am concerned, the governments should fund the artisans more than athletics. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will explore in following essay.
First and foremost, the art is a symbol of a nation which assists in introducing the national's culture to the world. People all around the world when travel to other countries, they want to get know about people's culture whose travel to. Therefore, when they step to that country the first thing that they see is the art of it, and before any discussions they make sense of them. As a result, governments should finance the artisan to left a maleficent hand-working behind themselves. My own travel story is a compelling example of this point. Last year, I went to India with my family, that was exciting because by the time we open our eyes, we could see all the temples with large amount of food in front of them. By the first glance, the art of Indian's people came to me and my family's eyes that they were full of colors, and symbols which give us a sense of their culture. Hence, we starting to respect to their believes and do not get laugh at them because their gods are different from us. As a result, had Indian's government had attention to other society's aspect like their athletics, we would not be able to understand their culture through their art.
The second reason that deserves attention is that art is a major that people can easily learn it and as a result they can have income from it. I mean that if the government give most its attention and finance aid to athletics, how many people can get involved? Or how many people have the ability to be an athlete. The answer to these questions is obvious, no more than hundreds of people can get involved, and people should try hard to be able to be a champion which needs a lot of money. The statistics have shown that cities with the high proportion of artists are wealthier than cities with the high proportion of champions, which this outcome is because of people's ability in producing money by the art they learn.
With all the above factors taken into consideration governments should pay the most fund to art than sport because of the fact that art is the best means for introducing national culture to the world, also it can participate a huge number of people within which they can make money from it.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 917, Rule ID: BELIEVE_BELIEF[1]
Message: Did you mean 'beliefs' (noun) instead of believes (verb)?
Suggestion: beliefs
... Hence, we starting to respect to their believes and do not get laugh at them because th...
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Line 7, column 108, Rule ID: BECAUSE_OF_THE_FACT_THAT[1]
Message: This phrase is redundant. Use simply 'because'.
Suggestion: because
...uld pay the most fund to art than sport because of the fact that art is the best means for introducing n...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, hence, if, second, so, therefore, i feel, i mean, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 21.0 11.0286738351 190% => OK
Pronoun: 58.0 43.0788530466 135% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 66.0 52.1666666667 127% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2140.0 1977.66487455 108% => OK
No of words: 470.0 407.700716846 115% => OK
Chars per words: 4.55319148936 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65612321451 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.509961142 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 230.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.489361702128 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 656.1 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.1103149547 48.9658058833 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.631578947 100.406767564 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.7368421053 20.6045352989 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.89473684211 5.45110844103 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.129710472775 0.236089414692 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0444653094403 0.076458572812 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.047051516928 0.0737576698707 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0997719235698 0.150856017488 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0299768727907 0.0645574589148 46% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 64.04 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.41 10.9000537634 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.38 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 86.8835125448 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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