In this progressive and sophisticated world where we live, governments play prominent role in human beings' lives. Governments decide to allocate their budget to which field in order to be more beneficial. Many individuals believe governments should devote more money to support arts than in support athletics. However, some others have an opposite point of view. In my vantage point, governments should spend more money to champion of athletics. In what follows, I will elaborate on my perspective.
First, it is significant to be mentioned that, athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams deserve more money budget, since they can return more money back to the country, so the budget would not waste. Put it in other words, athletics and Olympic teams of a country are such money making part of the country. Thus, with financial support from government they can win the competitions and bring a lot of money to community. For instance, my country has a potent volleyball team, and spend budget to improve the team performance by hiring best coaches and providing contemporary equipment for team members. Every year, our team win the competitions and get the first prize and a lot of money. Thus, it has worth to spending money in this team. If my country had not spent money, our volleyball team would not be able to win the prize and get money.
Another reason which deserves some attention here is that, financial supporting athletic teams by governments gives the team members a good motivation to act better and provides fascinating environment to finding talents. It is crystal clear that, money is of significant importance in teams' prosperity and is an impetus for people to join sport teams. To be more specific, allotting money to sport teams is a good indicator of paying attention to this field and encourage the team members to do their best and kept practicing.
From what has been discussed above, we may safely reach the conclusion that, governments should spend more money in support of sport teams instead of art. Since, sport teams not only increase the economic of the country but also encourage team members to be more successful.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, so, thus, for instance, such as, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 43.0788530466 56% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1801.0 1977.66487455 91% => OK
No of words: 359.0 407.700716846 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.01671309192 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35284910392 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77272831055 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 212.727598566 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.515320334262 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 548.1 618.680645161 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.471434581 48.9658058833 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.055555556 100.406767564 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.9444444444 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.61111111111 5.45110844103 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.3521685754 0.236089414692 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.119492277994 0.076458572812 156% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.116620008637 0.0737576698707 158% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.218589265267 0.150856017488 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0677278738095 0.0645574589148 105% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 11.7677419355 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.92 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 86.8835125448 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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