govt should spend more money in support of arts than in support of athletic such as state-sponsored Olympic Team.agree or not support opinion
BY and large, it is established beyond fact that a flourishing and prospering environment is a necessity for everyone living in a society. Vividly, authorities are responsible for improving the circumstances of societies. In this regard, financial support is of paramount importance for the establishment and success of a society. There had been no shortage of debate among people, some consider that the government should invest money in support of arts, where others contemplate that authorities need to invest resources for Athletic activities. If I were asked, I would definitely disagree with spending on Arts, rather reinforces the investment in Athletic sports. In what follows, I will delve into the most crucial reasons to substantiate my viewpoints.
The first compelling reason corroborating my ideas is that government support in athletic sports will leads to the development of a society. It is noticeable that many individuals are jobless and they have nothing that keeps them engaged. Their depressing lifestyle results in an increase in the crime ratio. If those people are provided with the opportunity to participate in recreational activities like sports, it would not only change their situation but also decline the crime rate. It is worth mentioning that when people focus their energy and determination on such activities, it results in bringing fame to society. By way of illustration. Last year, my neighboring state-sponsored Soccer team won a gold medal and prize of 1$0,000. The authorities decided to build a new department for the welfare of society with that prize money. It is crystal clear to see that athletic activities are critical for the betterment and growth of a population.
The second rationale behind my reason is rooted in the fact that individuals participating in such motor activities learn a big deal of practical skills. They develop leadership and teamwork skills that are a big asset in their future career. Not to mention, they are improving their physical and mental capabilities. A healthy body has a sound mind. It is axiomatic that people who are physically active, their brain activity is enhanced to make their life more productive. My example of this matter elucidates my standpoint. Five years ago, I was a couch potato and extremely idle, an average worker at my job. Then I joined my city basketball sports team. It changed my life upside down, I realized the importance of health and lost weight. Not only my physical health improved, but also my work efficiency is enhanced. It is clear to see why I think that why athletic performances need more government support than arts activities. On other hand, many private organizations are ready to sponsor art exhibitions.
By perusing the above paragraphs, one can infer that spending on athletic activities and creating a state Olympic team is of myriad advantages. For the sake of brevity, a couple of the points are worth reiterating. First, It will result in the advancement of society and brings overall fame to the state. Second, it will improve the health of youngsters and teach them practical skills. A for this writer’s suggestion, I vehemently urge people to raise their votes to get donations for developing a sponsored Olympic team.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 103, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'lead'
Suggestion: lead
...ernment support in athletic sports will leads to the development of a society. It is ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, so, then, i think, by and large
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 15.1003584229 166% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 61.0 43.0788530466 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 64.0 52.1666666667 123% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 8.0752688172 223% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2733.0 1977.66487455 138% => OK
No of words: 528.0 407.700716846 130% => OK
Chars per words: 5.17613636364 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.79356345386 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.035978941 2.67179642975 114% => OK
Unique words: 283.0 212.727598566 133% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.535984848485 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 864.0 618.680645161 140% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 22.0 9.59856630824 229% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 32.0 20.6003584229 155% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.3865961482 48.9658058833 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.40625 100.406767564 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.5 20.6045352989 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.90625 5.45110844103 35% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 22.0 11.8709677419 185% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.200781067567 0.236089414692 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0403892881862 0.076458572812 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.057084815669 0.0737576698707 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.11829832794 0.150856017488 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0101010337269 0.0645574589148 16% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 11.7677419355 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 58.1214874552 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.47 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.68 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 142.0 86.8835125448 163% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 85.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.5 Out of 30
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