High salaries with high risks of losing a job or low salary and secure job. Which would you prefer?
Occupation, the foundation of a quality life, has aroused discussions and even debates over the preferable choice of it. A less rewarding but secure one, in some people’s view, should be prioritized. Contrary to these people’s opinions is my perspective that it is advisable to locate careers with high salaries though at the risk of losing them.
What must be prioritized is that employees, embarking on a high-paid career, can be placed as beneficiaries, rather than owing jobs with low salaries. To begin with, it is high positions with high salaries that benefit a person himself. Specially, the more money one earned from his careers and positions, the more likely his daily necessities, including the acquisition of luxuries, frequent vacations and wholesome food, can be satisfied. How could niches with low salaries bring such benefits? In addition, it is acknowledged that one’s family members can reap and harvest benefits from his high-paid positions. To explain it further, with sufficient money received from his occupations, one can provide constant and continuous medical care for his older parents and first-class education for his children. Among employees, with decent careers, is one from Google. Earning 6000 dollars per month, he bought a BMW automobile for himself. What’s more, each month, he and his family members visit Europe on a regular basis. Never could a person with a less rewarding careers achieve these.
What should be equally worth discussing is that the chances of losing a job can be easily reduced and decreased. Initially, never should we ignore the significance of boosting and enhancing productivity to securing a career. In detail, only via reducing time allocated to distractions or interruptions, impairing efficiency, and committing fewer mistakes, can we lower the risk of losing careers. Moreover, it is beneficial and advantageous to stable occupations to maintain and strengthen an initimate bond with supervisors. To be more specific, the more one builds and established a harmonious relationship with his executives, the more likely he will win favor and appreciation, increasing his occupation security. A survey conducted by Harvard University, aiming to discover the effect of high efficiency and strong connection on the stability of positions, suggests that they can exert positive influences. According to an interviewee, if he did not increase his productivity by accomplishing two crucial projects efficiently and effectively within only a week, he could lose his decent positions in Google, a prestigious organization. Furthermore, by engaging himself into genuine communications and interactions with his leaders, he ensured a stable occupation.
A well-paid vocation, the objective everyone strives for, benefits people in many respects, as illustrated in one working in Google. Possibilities of Losing careers, impacting individual’s well-being, can be reduced to some extent, as exemplified in the survey of Harvard University. To conclude, only via pursuing a rewarding occupation though with high risks of losing it can people reap and harvest benefits.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 1068, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'career'?
Suggestion: career
...er could a person with a less rewarding careers achieve these. What should be equall...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, if, moreover, so, then, well, in addition, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2661.0 1977.66487455 135% => OK
No of words: 479.0 407.700716846 117% => OK
Chars per words: 5.55532359081 4.8611393121 114% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67825486995 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.19554460997 2.67179642975 120% => OK
Unique words: 270.0 212.727598566 127% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.563674321503 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 826.2 618.680645161 134% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 10.0 3.08781362007 324% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 12.0 4.94265232975 243% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.1920348421 48.9658058833 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.875 100.406767564 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.9583333333 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.375 5.45110844103 62% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.226770580487 0.236089414692 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0691018244771 0.076458572812 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0812201873042 0.0737576698707 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.145620418819 0.150856017488 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0419306518267 0.0645574589148 65% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 11.7677419355 125% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 58.1214874552 75% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.97 10.9000537634 137% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.08 8.01818996416 126% => OK
difficult_words: 167.0 86.8835125448 192% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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