How do movies and television influence people's behavior.? Give reasons and examples to support your answer.

Submitted by beygi20 on Sat, 08/10/2019 - 14:39

Movies are popular because people are great watchers. They like to watch other
peoples' lives. They like to live vicariously. By going to movies, we can escape
our own lives, share other people's emotions, and imagine ourselves as
someone else.
Many of our lives are not as adventurous or glamorous as the lives in movies.
We do not battle evil all day long and then go back to our luxurious penthouse
apartment. We just go to school, do our homework, eat, talk to our friends, and
sleep. We need a little excitement in our lives and we find excitement at the
movies.
Humans are very emotional people. We all like to cry and laugh. Fortunately,
there is not much to cry about in my life so I like to go to sad movies where my
heartstrings can be tugged. I also like to go to comedies so that I can laugh. I
tend to cry and laugh more in a dark movie theater than I do in broad daylight.
Now I am a student, but I know someday I will be a scientist or a politician or a
famous model. When I go to the movies, I can see my role models. I see how
they act, what they wear, how they talk. I can prepare myself for the day when I
will be like them.
Even though my life is quiet, I can go to the movies and watch someone else's
life. I can share their emotions and their everyday life. I wonder if they would
like to share mine.

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Average: 6 (1 vote)
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Independent TOEFL Writing

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 8, column 8, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
..., eat, talk to our friends, and sleep. We need a little excitement in our lives a...
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, then

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 52.1666666667 61% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1097.0 1977.66487455 55% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 261.0 407.700716846 64% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.2030651341 4.8611393121 86% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0193898071 4.48103885553 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.3652480215 2.67179642975 89% => OK
Unique words: 136.0 212.727598566 64% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.521072796935 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 347.4 618.680645161 56% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 20.1344086022 65% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 27.0242483707 48.9658058833 55% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 54.85 100.406767564 55% => More chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 13.05 20.6045352989 63% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.15 5.45110844103 21% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 16.0 4.53405017921 353% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.077784564369 0.236089414692 33% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0260522099472 0.076458572812 34% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0351120044028 0.0737576698707 48% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0310632775291 0.150856017488 21% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0292813370065 0.0645574589148 45% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 4.9 11.7677419355 42% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 83.66 58.1214874552 144% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 4.8 10.1575268817 47% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 6.19 10.9000537634 57% => Coleman_liau_index is low.
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.58 8.01818996416 82% => OK
difficult_words: 38.0 86.8835125448 44% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.002688172 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.2 10.0537634409 72% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200

Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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