There is a competition among individuals to find a proper job position. In this situation, some people believe that if there is a dilemma between getting a secure job and searching for a satisfying job, it is better to choose the first option than to wait for the second choice. I, personally, cast doubt on the first viewpoint due to several conspicuous reasons which will be elaborated as follows.
Firstly, an individual should apply in a job position that satisfies them, for the promotion probability in a job that he/she always wants to have is much more than an ordinary secure job. It is crystal clear that everyone has different particular talents and interests, in which if they follow them, they might do several developments at their position. My uncle lifestyle is a real example to prove my viewpoint. He tried to work as a bank employee. However, he always wanted to be a retailer. Therefore, he decided to quit his job and follow his dream, which was his best decision, because, currently, he is one of the well-known retailers in Tehran.
Moreover, a person who prefers to be in a secure non-satisfied job, cannot ignore his/her dream. Therefore, they believe that they could have a better life quality if they followed their interests. They will always regret their selves when they are retired. There are a lot of instances about this situation among our elder acquaintances. They state their diary and advise us not to be in a secure career that might be a barrier to reach dreams.
In conclusion, there are several remarkable reasons for an individual not to accept a job just because of its security. The two vital ones are discussed in the aforementioned paragraphs to approve my opinion. Therefore, I completely disagree with the topic and believe that finding a satisfying job would be better than being in a secure job.
- It is more enjoyable to have a job where you work only three days a week for long hours than to have a job where you work five days a week for shorter hours. 73
- It is more enjoyable to have a job where you work only three days a week for long hours than to have a job where you work five days a week for shorter hours. 73
- Do you agree or disagree？ It is better to relax by watching a movie or reading a book than doing physical exercise. Explain your answer with examples and specific reasons. 70
- If people have the opportunity to get a secure job, they should take it right away rather than wait for a job that would be more satisfying 70
- Young people nowadays do not give enough time to helping their communities 70
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, however, if, moreover, second, so, therefore, well, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 52.1666666667 65% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1541.0 1977.66487455 78% => OK
No of words: 316.0 407.700716846 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.87658227848 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21620550194 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82625056866 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 212.727598566 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.553797468354 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 488.7 618.680645161 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.2116154219 48.9658058833 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.6470588235 100.406767564 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5882352941 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.76470588235 5.45110844103 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.388262723077 0.236089414692 164% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.106902291343 0.076458572812 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.111849490059 0.0737576698707 152% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.239772645927 0.150856017488 159% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0345766058377 0.0645574589148 54% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 11.7677419355 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.02 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.23 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 86.8835125448 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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