If you could change one important thing about your hometown, what would you change? Use reasons and specific examples to support your answer
Appearing over the world map, every country, represented a distinct blending mixture colors, possesses outstanding properties of historical slices, natural conditions, development status, executive regime …those’re necessarily improving over time aiming to meet people’s life-quality-satisfaction. As an assumption, if possibly being on behalf of the country’s executive roles; educational system must stand at top priority of the list of significant in-need-modifications for such 2 major reasons in terms of competent human resource of younger generations, stimulation for national development.
Above off all, education plays as an intellectual equipment for the departure of training a remarkable human resource. Without any doubt, education functions to fulfill human development as growing intelligence resource, modifying attitude and behavior, building great social and community circle. First and foremost, the world todays running on the war among “giant brains and extraordinary intelligences” when it’s never wrong to say a nation’s rich level decided by its people’s intelligence. In particular, the last industrial revolution orients the most important developing industries focusing on human intelligence deployment such as AI-artificial intelligence, machine learning, Robotics, …Secondly, educational performance contributes to support people’s maturing process as building an appropriate pattern of attitude and behavior. For example, vulnerable souls remember unhappy experience and violent treatment from childhood, that exposing under their undesirable behavior and a negative attitude to the world, necessarily need assistance from schooling and education for healing these pains. Finally, education creates and simulates a small society for helping students and people get used to engage in community and acknowledge how important social circle playing in their life, especially in the era of international integration. For instance, one of the most on-required-features of a highly-appreciated employee relates to such great social skills he/she owns since a successful entrepreneur always taking tremendous advantages from his/her social circle of relationships. Apparently, national government and executives should put strong effort into improving educational performance as aiming to a fulfillment human resource dedicated not only for their country only but also the world’s mission in needed.
Moreover, government must stretch great efforts on education development when looking at in-dept symbiosis on earning mutual benefits based on close-knit relationships among education and other areas and domains. This evokes arguments when some complaint that government should consider more-direct-strategy and pour out their money directly for such development purpose in economy, industry, medicine…instead of paying for education and waiting for it exposing influences on others. Actually, when looking at macro pictures of these issues, each one, without any doubt, requires specific government orientation on chasing its competent pinpoint at a satisfied development level since it seems not clear to see which one be outstanding at influential power. However, specialized research and analyzed statistic had showed the acceptable answer for the driving feature to the country development in general, and that says nothing but educational performance. Proving for this, it has been witnessing that the leading trend follow up new industrial revolutions focuses on new areas and domains with great assistance of advanced technology and science, also tends to replace traditional fields using almost manual labors, and obviously, new things need to be learnt and educational function activated for supporting this. Particularly, professors on generally national development show that the high rate of skillful employees and professional scholars those possess high level in their knowledge and experience contributes as the most significant feature to country growing. As a result, governments offer valuable scholarships and great opportunity for students studying abroad and then encourage them to delicate their knowledge for national development, especially in major such as computer and machine learning, data science, medicine and pharmacy science….In addition, transferring skillful and advanced labor resource among countries stands on trending of companies and firms on every domain and fields, saying the importance of intellectual power constituted by educational performance. On conclusion, it’s impossible to negate that an effective education system drives to the general country development.
To conclude, playing as a part of the country executives, education must be considered the most favorable features those are in need of significant improvements because of its tremendous influential power on driving the country’s development level growing thanks to an excellent human resource.
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- As early as the twelfth century A D the settlements of Chaco Canyon in New Mexico in the American Southwest were notable for their great houses massive stone buildings that contain hundreds of rooms and often stand three or four stories high Archaeologist 80
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement Parents are the best teachers Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer 76
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- Topic Do you agree or disagree with the following statement People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment doing things they like to do rather than doing things they should do 70
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'intellectual equipment'.
Suggestion: intellectual equipment
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Suggestion: Secondly
...elligence, machine learning, Robotics, …Secondly, educational performance contributes to...
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Message: Add a space between sentences
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, apparently, but, finally, first, however, if, look, moreover, second, secondly, so, then, for example, for instance, in addition, in general, in particular, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 15.1003584229 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 33.0 13.8261648746 239% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 93.0 52.1666666667 178% => OK
Nominalization: 52.0 8.0752688172 644% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 4282.0 1977.66487455 217% => Less number of characters wanted.
No of words: 690.0 407.700716846 169% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.20579710145 4.8611393121 128% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.12521717326 4.48103885553 114% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.4463816872 2.67179642975 129% => OK
Unique words: 388.0 212.727598566 182% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.56231884058 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 1315.8 618.680645161 213% => syllable counts are too long.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.9 1.51630824373 125% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 36.0 20.1344086022 179% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 88.0271929781 48.9658058833 180% => OK
Chars per sentence: 225.368421053 100.406767564 224% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 36.3157894737 20.6045352989 176% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.1578947368 5.45110844103 186% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0369429471645 0.236089414692 16% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0124328321364 0.076458572812 16% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0166269923066 0.0737576698707 23% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0195229897539 0.150856017488 13% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0148382622182 0.0645574589148 23% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 26.0 11.7677419355 221% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 9.56 58.1214874552 16% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 14.6 6.10430107527 239% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 20.9 10.1575268817 206% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 19.33 10.9000537634 177% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.96 8.01818996416 137% => OK
difficult_words: 242.0 86.8835125448 279% => Less difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 17.0 10.002688172 170% => OK
gunning_fog: 16.4 10.0537634409 163% => OK
text_standard: 17.0 10.247311828 166% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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