Independent essay
will the robotics and machines replace the humans? What do you think? Explain your answer with details.
Without doubt robotics and computer machines nowadays invade our world in many fields, and the majority of the humans are in worries and question will the robotics and those machines will replace our jobs and our lives. In my opinion, I don’t think so. For few reasons which I explore them in the following essay. At the beginning, the robotics and artificial intelligence (AI) nowadays invade our world in many countries like the USA , Britain and others in many fields of life like farming, cashiers, market, taxi drivers, restaurants, supermarkets ,factories,….etc. However those machines with all the respect they are machines and the human who makes. Although the fascinating tasks those machines do, the human intelligence is the basic. Furthermore, not all the jobs those machines can do, as example the jobs which depend on creation like art, writing, music or acting or the jobs which depend on interaction like doctors, psychiatrics, children teachers…etc. all those jobs will not be affected and they will be out of count, in my view in the future because for sure although the intelligence of the system which those machines are made by, they couldn’t feel like humans, they don’t have the emotions or empathy. But that will put a bog burden on the shoulder of humans and it will be other restrictions that the humans who will work should be creative and so intelligent to prove their selves. Moreover, not all countries can purchase those machines, maybe the big developed countries but not the minor ones. Also the countries which will purchase those machines should expand or their business will be sooner expand, so as the result of the expansion the jobs will be increased so for sure the humans will be in need, because of the delusive and fanciful prices of those machines and most of businesses from my view they will want less cost not huge one, so by the end the businesses couldn’t abandon the humans. All in all, even though the robotics and computer machines invade the world, they never took all the places of humans. Humans are the basics of the intelligence which make those machines. Not all jobs will be replaced by the robotics, robotics couldn’t create or feel. Not all the countries couldn’t buy those machines just only the major countries, as well the expansion of the businesses will require more workers which will be humans for less cost than robotics and AI.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, may, moreover, so, well, in my opinion, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 9.8082437276 204% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 22.0 13.8261648746 159% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 52.1666666667 73% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2037.0 1977.66487455 103% => OK
No of words: 409.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.9804400978 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49708221141 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78786035837 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 212.727598566 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.457212713936 0.524837075471 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 616.5 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 31.0 20.1344086022 154% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 130.140661271 48.9658058833 266% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 156.692307692 100.406767564 156% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.4615384615 20.6045352989 153% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.69230769231 5.45110844103 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 1.0 4.53405017921 22% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 15.0 5.5376344086 271% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.133231548221 0.236089414692 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0722387200356 0.076458572812 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0521393209159 0.0737576698707 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.133231548221 0.150856017488 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.8 11.7677419355 151% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.47 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 10.1575268817 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.2 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.61 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 86.8835125448 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 10.0537634409 143% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.