In this modern era, people are surrounded with technology in every sphere of their lives. Television broadcasts and movies are most people’s choice for their leisure time at weekend. The question we might address is that whether it is a good idea for youngsters to spend their free time watching movies or not. From my perspective, I think watching movies will not be a suitable choice for young people for the following reasons: it lowers their brain activity, Makes them have some unrealistic expectation from life, and is harmful for their physical health.
First and foremost, watching media will reduce the brain activity, and constantly it will affect our mental health. According to a research done by a group of scientists in England. They believe watching scenes will affect the way brain cells work and eventually end having some mental disorders. They think watching movies is probably one of the main reasons for having depression and feel exhausted and even make them feel alone.
Secondly, I believe watching soap operas and movies which concentrate on luxury life style will affect teenagers expectations from life. They will probably start thinking that they can have the same lifestyle doing same things. Eventually they will end up broken hearted and hopeless when they experience failure as they probably forget the fact that they have to put all their energy in order to be successful. For example, I was once reading an article written by a famous billionaire in which he was pointing out his success and he said the key to his triumph was those hours spent at the office trying to solve an issue about a project. While watching biography movies, you will never feel the effort they put to their work.
Last but not least, nowadays people are mostly doing office jobs doing same tasks every day, and seating in a chair watching movies will increase the chances of getting fat, having pain in different part of their bodies like their knees and their back, having a bad posture day by day. I had a friend who was a bank clerk, having a solid job and watching movies as a habit eventually made her to go to doctor. She had problem doing her tasks at work because of her backache and the doctor advised her to change her habits in order to have healthy life style.
To sum up, according to the mentioned reasons I believe spending time in front of the television will have bad effects far beyond our imagination. Having some healthy habits will help us to maintain a better life being active and fit.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 235, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...ain a better life being active and fit. .
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, second, secondly, so, while, for example, i think, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2099.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 436.0 407.700716846 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.81422018349 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56953094068 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.42843411084 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 236.0 212.727598566 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.54128440367 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 631.8 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.8633068124 48.9658058833 120% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.611111111 100.406767564 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.2222222222 20.6045352989 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.22222222222 5.45110844103 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 11.8709677419 34% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.236089414692 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.076458572812 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150856017488 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 11.7677419355 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 64.04 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.01 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 86.8835125448 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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