Integrated writing - TPO 51
The main idea of both the passage and the talk is about the common beliefs about surprising elephant behaviors. The author presents three astonishing behavior of elephants. The lecturer challenges all the arguments and believes that all of these beliefs are based on misunderstanding by people.
Firstly, the author states that elephants are aware of approaching death since they leave their herd when they become older. Conversely, the lecturer brings up the idea that when the elephants become elder, they have difficulty to chew all the plants because their teeth lose its capability. In this case, the older elephants leave the herds to obtain softer plants for their survival. Additionally, because the softer plants are usually located near water sources, elephants die in those locations.
Moreover, the author asserts that elephants are able to paint some recognizable artistic pictures such as flowers on a canvas. The speaker, on the contrary, points out that elephants are capable to paint only certain things such as lines because they are trained to perform these tasks. As a result, the mentioned lines do not represent any specific objects.
Eventually, the reading passage holds the opinion that elephants have a fear of mice and provide a scientific experiment to show the accuracy of this belief. The lecturer, on the other hand, says that elephants like other animals when see an unfamiliar animals show some unusual behavior. Furthermore, she claims that elephants do not show same behavior in the zoo because they are familiar with mice. Therefore, this belief cannot be true.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 174, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...hree astonishing behavior of elephants. The lecturer challenges all the arguments a...
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Line 7, column 254, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'animal'?
Suggestion: animal
...ke other animals when see an unfamiliar animals show some unusual behavior. Furthermore...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
conversely, first, firstly, furthermore, if, moreover, so, therefore, such as, as a result, on the contrary, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 9.8082437276 10% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 13.8261648746 22% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 43.0788530466 56% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 52.1666666667 54% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1348.0 1977.66487455 68% => OK
No of words: 256.0 407.700716846 63% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.265625 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0 4.48103885553 89% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65415530918 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 149.0 212.727598566 70% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.58203125 0.524837075471 111% => OK
syllable_count: 420.3 618.680645161 68% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 11.0 3.08781362007 356% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.9632039843 48.9658058833 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.2857142857 100.406767564 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.2857142857 20.6045352989 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.0 5.45110844103 165% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 11.8709677419 25% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.236089414692 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.076458572812 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150856017488 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 11.7677419355 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 10.9000537634 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.79 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 86.8835125448 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
More content wanted.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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