It is better for children to choose the job that is very similar to their parent than to choose a completely different job.explain your answers with reasons
By and large it is established beyond doubt that people adopt different ways for their living. In this regard, choosing a career is of paramount importance. There has been no shortage of debate amongst scholars on weather people should choose a job entirely different from their parents, or they contemplates to follow up on their parents' step. As for writers opinion, I subscribe to the later idea. In what follows, I will delve into most crucial reasons to substantiate my viewpoint.
The first reason coming to my mind to elucidate my point of view is associated with the idea that if children choose a profession similar to their parents,they will have complete guidance and support of their guardians. To be more specific, parents can supports them and direct them to the path of their success. Vividly, it will enhance their knowledge as parents are expertise in their field and children can get benefit from their knowledge by improving and learning from them. My experience on this is influenced by my compelling example. Five years ago , when I selected pharmacy as a career for me, I chooses that profession because of my father who work as a pharmacist. Whenever I have any difficult in studies, my father is there to help me. On the other hand, my colleagues have to hire private tutors for their studies. Had not my father in same profession, I would have been gotten immense assistance in studies.
The second rationale for my opinion is rooted in the fact thAt when children adopt a job similar to their parents, it will provide the them with the opportunity to get a better position and good salary in their job. It is crystal clear that patent have strengthen their working relationship at their job, children can take advantage of those interpersonal relationships to succeed. It is axiomatic that parents can do anything for the better future of their child, and it is nothing if they have to ask their superior for child's promotion. For instance, when I started doing job as a pharmacist my father used his personal relations with his supervisor to get me the job. I was hired by his company and even got raise in salary after six month of my job because of my efficient working skills. It's clear to see that how my father,being in the same job, has provided me with the successful job and even promotion.
By perusing the above paragraphs, one can infer that when parents and children are in same job it is extremely beneficial. For the sake of brevity, a couple of points are worth reiterating, first children get to learn from them, second, they can utilize their experience to reach success. As for this writer's advice, I vehemently urge people to have same job as their parents for their betterment.
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..., I vehemently urge people to have same job as their parents for their betterment.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, second, so, then, as for, for instance, by and large, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 78.0 43.0788530466 181% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 65.0 52.1666666667 125% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2255.0 1977.66487455 114% => OK
No of words: 472.0 407.700716846 116% => OK
Chars per words: 4.77754237288 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.6610686524 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71615315161 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 232.0 212.727598566 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.491525423729 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 698.4 618.680645161 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.7518551412 48.9658058833 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.5 100.406767564 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4545454545 20.6045352989 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.72727272727 5.45110844103 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 5.5376344086 217% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.344973010342 0.236089414692 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.106297906301 0.076458572812 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0734842436006 0.0737576698707 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.229547160702 0.150856017488 152% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0433110959077 0.0645574589148 67% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 11.7677419355 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.44 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.29 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 86.8835125448 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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