It is better for children to choose jobs that are similar to their parent s jobs than to choose jobs that are very different from their parent s job

Job play one of the most important roles in our life so, we should choose our job very precisely. Different people have diverse opinions about whether it is good for children to choose jobs that are similar to their parents' jobs or not. Some of them think that it is good for them to resume their tendency and choose jobs that are very different from their parents' jobs; however, as far as I am concerned, I really disagree with their mentality and I think that children should follow their parents' jobs or choose jobs that are similar to parents' jobs. I feel this way for a couple of reasons. which I will explain in the following essay.

The first and foremost reason that comes into the writer's mind is that we can use parents' experiences. To be specific, parents work in their jobs many hours so, they gain a lot of experience with that and we can ask them to earn these experiences in free. My personal experience is a compelling illustration of this. My father was a teacher. Four years ago, I would be able to get a job that was about teaching in high school that was relevant to my father's job. I decided to accept this offer. I earned many experiences in one month and I was being able to prepare myself very well to have a good act in the classroom. Many new teachers have some trouble with students and schools in the early days and could not handle these problems. I learned many things from my father such as how to behave with my students and how to give them some assignments to do. My manager was being shocked by my performance in school.

Another equality imperative reason but not least which deserves some words here is that by this activity, the children do not waste any of their time or money to be masters in their jobs. For being a master in certain jobs, the workers need to gain a lot of experience from their work while they can get easily these experiences from their parents. They can easily reach their purpose if they choose the jobs. For instance, I and my brother are twins. he decided to pursue his interest but, I decided to go another way, and I choose my father's job. After five years, he gained only 1 million dollars, and I earned four times more than his budget. For me, gain a lot of money is a sign of success. This happened just because I chose a job that is familiar to me and I get a lot of advice from my father and he did not any background about the job.

To sum, the above-discussed reasons lend me strong ground to claim that it is very good for children to choose jobs that are similar to their parents' jobs. It is because of many experiences that they have this chance to earn it from them, and they would not wast any of their times or money to get some experiences to call them as a worker that has expertise in that work.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, really, so, well, while, for instance, i feel, i think, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 15.1003584229 166% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.0286738351 172% => OK
Pronoun: 96.0 43.0788530466 223% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 68.0 52.1666666667 130% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2266.0 1977.66487455 115% => OK
No of words: 523.0 407.700716846 128% => OK
Chars per words: 4.3326959847 4.8611393121 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.78217453174 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.32825015955 2.67179642975 87% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.42638623327 0.524837075471 81% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 702.9 618.680645161 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 9.59856630824 188% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 65.7260983172 48.9658058833 134% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.64 100.406767564 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.92 20.6045352989 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.52 5.45110844103 65% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.465538296972 0.236089414692 197% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.124645283507 0.076458572812 163% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.164585563599 0.0737576698707 223% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.336156140359 0.150856017488 223% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.199779963086 0.0645574589148 309% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.4 11.7677419355 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 76.56 58.1214874552 132% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.83 10.9000537634 72% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.65 8.01818996416 83% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 86.8835125448 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 17.5 10.002688172 175% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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