It is better to travel abroad to visit different countries when you are young rather than you are old
It goes without saying that going on a trip or traveling is one of the most enjoyable creations for today’s people. There has been a controversial debate among huge fans of traveling as to whether more beneficial than traveling in old age is going on trips at a young age. From my perspective, traveling and visiting different places when we are young is so worthwhile, and two reasons to support my viewpoint are presented as follows.
To begin with, going on trips at a young age, people are more likely to be successful individuals in their future. It is not a secret to anyone that journeying have a lot of upsides and merits for travelers since they will be familiar with different cultures and traditions or even different beliefs and views during a trip; it is really helpful for people specially youths spending their formative years which is one of the most significant period of their lives since the character formation happens in this time. it is crystal clear that acquiring knowledge and experiences in such ages is extremely crucial because juveniles should learn how to be independent and how to distinguish evil from good in order to make best decisions when they face dilemma. Traveling a lot, young people will be informed of totally different aspects of the world which brings them precis experiences that can help them during the living, however old people, who are spending twilight years, have stable and complete personalities that are not changeable anymore, so they are just able to enjoy traveling; and younger people can take the advantages of their age and enjoy both traveling and its valuable experiences and information. Attaining more knowledge, youths will make better choices in their lives, thereby they will be more successful people in their personal lives.
Furthermore, going on trips in youth, young people will enjoy traveling more that people being old. Obviously, juveniles have better overall heath and more passions in comparison with older individuals in which they have an opportunity to make the most of their time to have fun. To put it in more vivid picture, when I went on a travel with my family, including my 75 years old grandmother, last year; although we traveled to beautiful place the north of Iran, where is full of jungles, my grandmother had a tough time being on a trip since she could not endure sitting into the car and walking in really pretty forests; she did not enjoy that journey and place. Had my grandmother traveled to such place at a young age, she would definitely have had enjoyable time. as you can see, having more interests, passions, and better health, mentally and physically, younger people have a chance to enjoy their journeys.
In sum, not only will people be more successful, they will also enjoy trips more. Everybody should experience traveling at youth ages.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, however, if, really, so, while, as to, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 15.1003584229 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 52.1666666667 121% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2376.0 1977.66487455 120% => OK
No of words: 481.0 407.700716846 118% => OK
Chars per words: 4.93970893971 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68313059816 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67110426597 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 242.0 212.727598566 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.503118503119 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 733.5 618.680645161 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 32.0 20.1344086022 159% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 120.940315859 48.9658058833 247% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 158.4 100.406767564 158% => OK
Words per sentence: 32.0666666667 20.6045352989 156% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.73333333333 5.45110844103 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.175821997246 0.236089414692 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0675675470139 0.076458572812 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0474988462307 0.0737576698707 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.115176907599 0.150856017488 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.066580792356 0.0645574589148 103% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.9 11.7677419355 152% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.46 58.1214874552 82% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 10.1575268817 144% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.96 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.57 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 86.8835125448 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.8 10.0537634409 147% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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