it is enough for the government to educate people about the importance of living a balanced and healthy life style
With growing concern of healthy life style among the people, the interesting discussion about whether the administration has provided enough education about importance of a healthy life is on the air. Some believe that the administration should do more. This view seems to be justiciable, but ignores the fact of enough education in the school and useless extra education. As a result, I believe that the administration has already done enough.
To begin with, the importance of healthy life style is well educated in the school, even in primary school. In China, every kid in the street can answer why we should do exercise every day, why or how to keep balance and healthy diet, because leading healthy life style can always be the next lesson after learning what we should do in an emergency time. As a result, some kid like my little nephew John even will teach his grandma or grandpa, who did not receive similar information when they were young, about healthy life style. Therefore, the government indeed has done a lot to educate people about the importance of healthy life style.
Additionally, it is unnecessary to always educate people about healthy life style, because their conscious of keeping healthy life style could be more vital than educating. For example, we can always see a warning -- "Smoking does harm your health" in the package of cigarette, because the government has forced the cigarette company to print this warning in the package. However, most of the smokers do not care about the warning, because they are still addicted to smoking even after they had known the harm of smoking for a long time. Therefore, the warning seems to be useless. Recently, some people in UK suggested that we should print a warning at the top of Junk food's package or put a sign outside of the fast food restaurant to prevent the children away from obesity. This suggestion, however, had been rejected by the local administration, because all local kids had already known the unhealthy diet about fast food, but the fast food is still their first choice.
Admittedly, some people always blame government for not educating people enough, but it is wide-known that there is enough opportunity of knowing the importance of healthy life style in the school. What is more, some extra education seems to be useless.
In a word, it could be safe to conclude that it is enough for the government to educate people about the importance of living a balanced and healthy life style.
- TPO-15 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? In order to become financially responsible adults, children should learn to manage their own money at young age. Use specific reasons and examples to support your ans 70
- we can learn about the person by the books or movies he loves 70
- it is enough for the government to educate people about the importance of living a balanced and healthy life style 73
- money reward cannot be the best way to encourage the children. 70
- the young people should plan or organize their own life. 73
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, so, still, therefore, well, as for, for example, as a result, to begin with, what is more
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 43.0788530466 58% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 8.0752688172 248% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2072.0 1977.66487455 105% => OK
No of words: 421.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.9216152019 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52971130743 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65870018753 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.472684085511 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 662.4 618.680645161 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.0270233409 48.9658058833 125% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.882352941 100.406767564 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.7647058824 20.6045352989 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.70588235294 5.45110844103 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.540585208211 0.236089414692 229% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.196169142882 0.076458572812 257% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.213441049438 0.0737576698707 289% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.404950139653 0.150856017488 268% => Maybe some contents are duplicated.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.185369776707 0.0645574589148 287% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 11.7677419355 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 58.1214874552 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.45 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 86.8835125448 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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