It has recently been announced that a new restaurant may be built in your neighborhood. Do you support or oppose this plan? Why? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.

The opening of something as simple as a restaurant can bring about a lot of changes to a community. In my opinion, the opening of such a business would be beneficial for my town, and I would support it. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.

First of all, businesses like restaurants provide valuable job opportunities for young people who live nearby. Positions at a restaurant do not require much prior experience, so they can be held by college students and even teenagers who are still in high school. Working part time can help young people pay for things like college tuition which they might not be able to afford otherwise. My cousin’s experience is a compelling example of what I mean. My cousin began university soon after he graduated from high school. At first, he did not have enough money to pay for his tuition, so he took out a big student loan to cover it. However, during his first semester a McDonald’s franchise opened close to his home. My brother applied for a position there and was fortunate enough to be hired. Thanks to the salary that he earned working there during evenings and weekends, he did not need to get a loan for the remainder of his time as a student. He graduated with only a small debt, and he says this is because of his job at the restaurant.

Secondly, a new restaurant can introduce us to aspects of a culture we are not familiar with. These days, many popular restaurants serve ethnic foods, so by eating in them we can learn about a culture that is unfamiliar to use. For example, a few years ago an Ethiopian diner opened in my home town. I had never eaten Ethiopian food at that time, but I ordered a plate of food there during its first week of operations. Everything about the meal was new to me, from the ingredients to the seasonings and even the fact that Ethiopian food is usually eaten using our hands rather than a fork and knife. This was an eye-opening experience for me, and I was actually inspired to someday visit Ethiopia so I could learn more about the country. I am not sure when this trip will occur, but I am determined to make it happen before I finish university.

In conclusion, I am totally in support of a new restaurant opening in my town. This is because it would provide more employment opportunities for young people, and because it would possibly introduce me to a new culture and cuisine.

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Average: 7 (1 vote)
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Independent TOEFL Writing

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, still, as for, for example, i feel, i mean, in conclusion, first of all, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 57.0 43.0788530466 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1992.0 1977.66487455 101% => OK
No of words: 438.0 407.700716846 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.54794520548 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57476223824 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69589365928 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 228.0 212.727598566 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.520547945205 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 639.0 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 31.0145260555 48.9658058833 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.5454545455 100.406767564 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.9090909091 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.5 5.45110844103 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0962054553746 0.236089414692 41% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0313234273954 0.076458572812 41% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0337918035214 0.0737576698707 46% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0736548287237 0.150856017488 49% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.026510207023 0.0645574589148 41% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.0 11.7677419355 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.11 10.9000537634 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.57 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 86.8835125448 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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