Because of the recent rapid development of internet, information become more accessible. However, it becomes an omnipresent that people could only receive opinions and views that are similar to their own. This phenomenon, named echo chamber, is the result of the advancement of algorithm. While some people may think it is good, I think it is of great importance to receive information of the opposite view.
To commence with, receiving information only from people who share the similar viewpoint with you would obscure the complete picture of the events from you. You could not understand what others' opinions are, and these would lead to wrong prediction. There is no better manifestation than the 2016 United States president election, when most of the organizations, ignoring the oppositions on social media and staying inside the echo chamber, predicted that Hilary would win. Because they do not receive enough information from their opponents, they make the wrong prediction.
Moreover, accepting the criticisms from others would allow you to improve. It is the human nature that we are blind to our shortcomings and weaknesses, and it is therefore difficult to correct them. Opinions from antagonists are precious because it allows us to realize our imperfections and thus rectify them. A famous emperor from Tang Dynasty said, ' Criticisms is a mirror that reflect the strength and weakness of oneself.' Without receiving information from critics, one could never make improvement.
In conclusion, information and news from opposite viewpoints are essential as they reveal you the complete picture and allow you to make improvement.
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement Young people should try several different jobs before they take a long term career 73
- TPO 11
- TPO 30
- It is more important to read and watch news presented by people whose opinion is different from your own view than by people whose opinion are similar to yours 66
- TPO 11 Integrated a decline in reading the literature 80
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 351, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...A famous emperor from Tang Dynasty said, Criticisms is a mirror that reflect the ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, may, moreover, so, therefore, thus, while, i think, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 52.1666666667 65% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.0752688172 198% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1386.0 1977.66487455 70% => OK
No of words: 257.0 407.700716846 63% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.39299610895 4.8611393121 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.00390054096 4.48103885553 89% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.903026241 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 147.0 212.727598566 69% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.571984435798 0.524837075471 109% => OK
syllable_count: 430.2 618.680645161 70% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.992480459 48.9658058833 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.0 100.406767564 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.3571428571 20.6045352989 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.57142857143 5.45110844103 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.170217942004 0.236089414692 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0577851647119 0.076458572812 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0582513622123 0.0737576698707 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.102044898659 0.150856017488 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0527694191338 0.0645574589148 82% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 11.7677419355 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 58.1214874552 77% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.98 10.9000537634 128% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.89 8.01818996416 111% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 86.8835125448 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
More content wanted.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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