Nowadays, students enjoy the excellent education system provided by our society, but students are still facing many difficulties. From my own perspective, I agree with the statement that the young should focus on learning facts rather than ideas or concepts. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will illuminate in the following essay.
First of all, I think learning facts could help students to develop their own independent thinking. What are concepts or ideas? They are other humans' opinions, which could be wrong and overthrown by other people. Consequently, it is independent thinking that helps students to challenge the current conventional theories and encourages them to build an original system of science. Finally, I think the key to forming an independent mind is to research facts directly. My experience is a compelling example of this argument. I was interested in reading so much that I requested myself to digest every detail I read. As a result, I came up with the idea that I should learn from others concerning how to finish a book perfectly. So I read a book describing a unique reading technique and discussed my inspirations with my classmates. However, I found these behaviors were wasting my precious time and limited attention since everyone had a particular taste belonging to himself. More importantly, their suggestions and feedbacks during the discussions were confusing because their reading motives differed from mine. As a result, I decided to learn to read by concentrating on the book in my hands and endeavored to avoid a missing part, which turned out to be meaningful. And now, I can thoroughly understand what I am reading and feel confident to say I excel at reading comprehension.
Secondly, learning facts could remove the barrier to students finishing difficult jobs. The aim of education is to direct actions, and a meaningful benefit of learning from facts is to accumulate experience since students can directly simulate the natural environment. It can teach the young some necessary skills. Especially the ability of keen observation. In contrast, the abstract concise essence of concepts sets a barrier for students, which restricts the youth from applying the sweet fruit from the human brain trees. For instance, I was always confused about the complicated knowledge systems in my textbooks. I knew they were all masterpieces written by brilliant predecessors. And they deeply disclosed the world we were living in. Nevertheless, they were too far from the actual world to follow. What a pity! In my opinion, I preferred to start with the world itself.
In conclusion, I support the statement that students should start with facts displayed by the natural world. This is because it has a positive effect on independent thinking and because it could accumulate helpful experience concerning of real world.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, finally, first, however, if, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, still, for instance, i feel, i think, in conclusion, in contrast, as a result, first of all, in my opinion, to start with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 55.0 43.0788530466 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 63.0 52.1666666667 121% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2408.0 1977.66487455 122% => OK
No of words: 463.0 407.700716846 114% => OK
Chars per words: 5.20086393089 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63868890866 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99225801545 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 253.0 212.727598566 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.546436285097 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 723.6 618.680645161 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 20.0 9.59856630824 208% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.6003584229 136% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.2398897177 48.9658058833 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.0 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.5357142857 20.6045352989 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.32142857143 5.45110844103 134% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.226398781374 0.236089414692 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0522785102799 0.076458572812 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0567862171669 0.0737576698707 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.133429490163 0.150856017488 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0566494167302 0.0645574589148 88% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 11.7677419355 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 58.1214874552 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.58 10.9000537634 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.8 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 128.0 86.8835125448 147% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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