it would be better to be informed about various events happening in the world even they do not have any apparent/conspicuous impact on our daily life directly
With the advent of the human's modern society, more and more international relations have been formed throughout the world. For this reason, a plethora of people believe>>believes that it would be better to be informed about various events happening in the world even they do not have any apparent/conspicuous impact on our daily life directly. Personally, I support this point of view. My reasons are manifold, among which the presence of indirect interaction among all societies and the possibility of repeating similar events in the future are the most significant.
The emergence of technology has brought numerous outcomes such as the higher interactions and communications among different parts of the world. For instance, nowadays, people have the opportunity to trade with a wide variety of regions by means of>>through airplanes, ships, and so forth. As a result, every slight turbulence in these relations may cause>>bring about a noticeable fluctuation in the others, at least indirectly. Consider the Iraq war; although a large proportion of countries did not buy oil from Iraq, they were faced with difficulties because of the increase in oil price. In other words, the reduction in oil production in Iraq resulted in escalating the world oil price and consequently, not only the buyers were influences but also other countries were affected indirectly.
Besides to the indirect relations, it is crystal clear that possessing a great deal of information play an indisputable role in every one's life. Beyond a shadow of a doubt, individuals with further experiences and knowledge are more likely to overcome the problematic issues. According to the research, conducted in>>at the University of Alberta, the person who gains information and experience either from himself or others, will be more prosperous in his or her life. In addition, there is a general and widespread idea that events are always happening repeatedly in different human being's life. Hence, each event is a feasible happening which will probably occur in our lives>>life sooner or later.
To sum up, considering the aforementioned aspects of this issue, we may reach the conclusion that it is better to have information about different happenings in the world, even at first blush it seems unrelated to our life, since a large proportion of such events will have some influences in everyone's life. Moreover, through knowing these events, we are able to make ourselves ready for the future.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, consequently, first, hence, if, may, moreover, so, at least, for instance, in addition, such as, as a result, in other words, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 43.0788530466 60% => OK
Preposition: 66.0 52.1666666667 127% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2088.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 394.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.29949238579 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45527027702 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.09270807004 2.67179642975 116% => OK
Unique words: 231.0 212.727598566 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.586294416244 0.524837075471 112% => OK
syllable_count: 662.4 618.680645161 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 12.0 4.94265232975 243% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.6863684662 48.9658058833 120% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.5 100.406767564 130% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.625 20.6045352989 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.6875 5.45110844103 178% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.38036311294 0.236089414692 161% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0999570806454 0.076458572812 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.169504752694 0.0737576698707 230% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.220977731999 0.150856017488 146% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.144097082687 0.0645574589148 223% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.8 11.7677419355 134% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 58.1214874552 67% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.1575268817 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.76 10.9000537634 126% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.32 8.01818996416 116% => OK
difficult_words: 112.0 86.8835125448 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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