Many people believe that it is very important to make large amount of money while others are satisfied to earn a comfortable living. Analyze each point and take a stand. Give specific reasons for your position.
Even the claim itself is convincing and reasonable because greater city usually require more funds to thrive, its reason is provincial. Sometimes major cities are ensured to be given large amount of fiscal support not due to its cultural advantage, but due to its development potential and extant population and local facility scale.
But I cannot wipe out the possibility that some big cities are given money for their cultural advantage. For example, some cities in China, where is one of the origins of Asia Culture, are protected well by providing enough funds. Xian, having the richest history in China, contains a plethora of relics in Chinese history, and it had become the capital city for over ten dynasty over the past two thousand years. However, given its location in the mid of China, its strategic value deteriorates a lot in modern society, so normally speaking it should have poor economic performance like cities around it as Gansu or Ningxia, but it turns out to be economic core in the mid-China. I believe the reason is its rich history, which is consistent with China's government's policy protecting traditional culture and building up cultural confidence. Thus, assigning more fiscal support to it could result from its cultural value.
However, rich history being the primary rationale for a city's financial support is not common, city like Xi An is anomalous. Multiple reasons could explain why countries must assign financial support to their big cities. In mid-eastern countries, they regard their major city as the impression of their whole country, then lend untold support to those cities on buildings, traffic systems and domestical facilities. And for city like New York City, a city contains the densest population in the world, received the highest support from federal government, but what history value could be found on it? I acknowledge that the NYC held relative rich history compared to America, since it was founded in 17C by immigrations, but the tradition culture is a very tiny factor affecting its fiscal support comparing with its financial potential. And even in city having both history and financial potential, the role of tradition culture preservation is still minuscule. Accordingly, history of city does play a role in influencing a country's decision on financial support, but we cannot conclude that into the only and vital one.
In sum, although the claim shows reasonableness, its underlying reason is too narrow. History factor is one of the factors explaining why country should assign fiscal support to major cities, but when compare to other reasons like economic potentials and the need of improve people's lives, it becomes extraneous.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 373, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'dynasty' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'dynasties'.
Suggestion: dynasties
...ad become the capital city for over ten dynasty over the past two thousand years. Howev...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, but, however, so, still, then, thus, well, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2270.0 1977.66487455 115% => OK
No of words: 436.0 407.700716846 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.20642201835 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56953094068 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72465480247 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 241.0 212.727598566 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.552752293578 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 723.6 618.680645161 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 10.0 1.86738351254 536% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 53.590979461 48.9658058833 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 133.529411765 100.406767564 133% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.6470588235 20.6045352989 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.94117647059 5.45110844103 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0625222518612 0.236089414692 26% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.024938368202 0.076458572812 33% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0201498799179 0.0737576698707 27% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0489011817486 0.150856017488 32% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0163172495186 0.0645574589148 25% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 11.7677419355 135% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 58.1214874552 65% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 10.1575268817 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.23 10.9000537634 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.33 8.01818996416 116% => OK
difficult_words: 123.0 86.8835125448 142% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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