Students have to choose their majors before entering college, directing future career. It’s accustomed to learning that individuals are frequently trapped in conflict with inner contradictions, thus it’s reasonable that quite a few citizens endorse students should follow parents’ advice. I, however, hold the counterargument that students should make decision by themselves instead.
First and foremost, I have noticed that it’s persuasive to lend credence to the idea that choosing the major by themselves is conducive to the academic development of students, by improving knowledge and triggering interests. Chiefly, under the pressure of the college entrance examination, students are keen to absorb more novel and innovative knowledge which is beyond the textbook. However, parents are usually so conservative that they tend to choose some traditional majors, such as math, chemistry, and physics, without fulfilling students’ desire of knowledge. Based on this point, I remembered that when I chose my major, my parents advised me to choose math because they only know very few majors. Nevertheless, with the hunger to learn more unknown field, finally I chose materials science. Furthermore, without little doubt, only students themselves know what they are interesting. As the old saying goes, interest is the best teacher. It’s fortunate for study to learn what they are interesting, benefiting their motivation and self-confidence. However, parents care more about future career than interests, wanting the children to have a stable life. Consequently, the claim that choosing the major independently is conducive to the academic development is justified.
Another vehicle to my opinion is that choosing major by students benefits the personal development, by building abilities like independence. As we know, it’s impossible for their children to follow their parents’ idea because they won’t be there all the time. Given the complex environment, such as interpersonal relationship, career promotion and the marriage, students will face in the future, it’s better to let them start to make decision by themselves like choosing a major, thus they will be independent. I am convinced that it’s what their parents genuinely expect. Accordingly, there is little doubt that choosing major independently rather than following parents’ advice will benefit the personal development.
To sum up, honestly, sometimes it’s hard to tell whether my point of view outweigh others’, given the complex condition described above. Nevertheless, after rigorous consideration, I deeply believe the conclusion that students should choose the major independently.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 623, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to major'
Suggestion: to major
...ly, there is little doubt that choosing major independently rather than following par...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, consequently, finally, first, furthermore, honestly, however, if, nevertheless, so, thus, such as, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.0752688172 198% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2297.0 1977.66487455 116% => OK
No of words: 395.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.81518987342 4.8611393121 120% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45809453852 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.0975032717 2.67179642975 116% => OK
Unique words: 221.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.559493670886 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 693.9 618.680645161 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.51630824373 119% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.9999019607 48.9658058833 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.85 100.406767564 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.75 20.6045352989 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.05 5.45110844103 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.437508080388 0.236089414692 185% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.121000814029 0.076458572812 158% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0707653682552 0.0737576698707 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.264451196574 0.150856017488 175% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.048755878481 0.0645574589148 76% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 11.7677419355 135% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.27 58.1214874552 61% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 10.1575268817 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.48 10.9000537634 151% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.22 8.01818996416 115% => OK
difficult_words: 116.0 86.8835125448 134% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.247311828 156% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 78.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.5 Out of 30
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