The more money people have, the more they should give it to the charity to help more people.
<span style="font-size: 17.6px;">Recently, the great economic boom has taken place, which stimulates a group of wealthy people from various fields. With great power comes great responsibility, some people argue that these rich individuals should be obliged to donate to the unprofitable institutions, like the charity, to assist others. Albeit seemingly plausible, from my perspective of view, there should be no such moral standard that the rich should make more donations than others, simply because they are endowed the rights to allocate properties and they have contributed to the society through taxation.
To begin with, one's bright future should be held in the palm of his or her own hand, which renders elites the right to deal with their assets without external controls. Since the current social atmosphere was stepping into an increasingly competitive stage, there have been more and more challenging dilemmas and obstacles lying on the way to success. In fact, being successful is never an easy thing, but involving the combined effects of tremendous efforts and strong self-reliance. Under no circumstances should civilian be forced to give up their own fruits by their diligence and intelligence, especially when it comes to so-called social responsibility. For instance, when Jack Ma, one of the richest men in China, was asked why he seldom devoted his wealth to the charity, this intellectual businessman responded, "I made all my achievements by my hands, and it is my rights on how I deal with my property." Had he lost control of his money, he might lose motivation to work hard.
What's more, the process of earning money itself is rewarding society due to taxation, so no more obligation should be accorded to the wealthy. Well-known is the truth that money is the tool of exchanging stuff and services. For those who accumulate a huge amount of money, they must produce far more values and contribute extensively compared to others. For example, Bill Gates invoked unprecedented innovations on computer systems; Jack Ma brought a profound revolution in the Chinese E-commerce. For those elites, earning money is never the purpose but the process of self-realization, because mature taxation systems have been implemented around the world in order to keep social fairness. In China, the taxation policy for those, whose incomes are over one million dollars per year, is fifty percent, and the money would flow into public infrastructures under the powerful supervision of the government. Thus, the rich do make a huge contribution to charity in an invisible way.
Based on the evidence above, we can safely arrive at the conclusion that the wealthy should be never required to provide more financial support owing to the reasons that they hold the control of their assets and have already contributed through invisible ways.</span>
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, so, thus, well, for example, for instance, in fact, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 64.0 52.1666666667 123% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2435.0 1977.66487455 123% => OK
No of words: 457.0 407.700716846 112% => OK
Chars per words: 5.32822757112 4.8611393121 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62358717085 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.12769321434 2.67179642975 117% => OK
Unique words: 276.0 212.727598566 130% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.603938730853 0.524837075471 115% => OK
syllable_count: 748.8 618.680645161 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.1344086022 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 67.1276477597 48.9658058833 137% => OK
Chars per sentence: 152.1875 100.406767564 152% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.5625 20.6045352989 139% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.625 5.45110844103 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.279752266323 0.236089414692 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0853486063305 0.076458572812 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0869624668804 0.0737576698707 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.166722597451 0.150856017488 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0368691486412 0.0645574589148 57% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.0 11.7677419355 153% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 58.1214874552 74% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 10.1575268817 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.93 10.9000537634 128% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.66 8.01818996416 120% => OK
difficult_words: 134.0 86.8835125448 154% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 10.002688172 150% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.0537634409 131% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 88.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.5 Out of 30
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