The most important thing the government should do to improve health care is to
clean the environment.
Nowadays, as an increasing need for improving life quality, people have attach more importance to pursuing a healthier lifestyle. The voice of requiring the government to invest more funding on public health care has been growing louder. Some people assert that the government ought to establish a more advanced medical system. However, from my perspective, it is advisable for the government to attach more importance to create a salubrious environment, as a most essential method.
First of all, a salubrious environment could provide the public necessary physical health. To be more specific, in order to create a clean environment, pollution discharged should be prohibited. A waste purification system could help in this process. Pollutions are the main carriers of the harmful chemical compounds that are poisonous to human health system. From the medical research publish from WHO, World Health Organization, the diseases related to breathing system shows an extremely positive relationship with air pollution, with a percentage confidence of 92%. People live in areas with heavy air pollution has 27% higher possibility to caught throat cancer. Moreover, the world-shocking disease, Minamata disease in Japan in last century which lead to over 1000 victims dead and ten thousands people affected, is directly caused by mercury pollution from nearby factory. These data and examples show the importance role that environment plays in improving public health care.
Secondly, the clean environment could grant people mental health. Mental health has been mentioned frequently nowadays, as a means of evaluating public health status more soundly. A health-friendly environment enable people to release pressure. Without a salubrious environment, depression could easily be developed. I have an example of my friend Simon. He was in a university in an industrialized city. With heavy pollution and without seeing a bright sky, he always complained about the environment to me. Later he was digested to have depression. However, things had changed when he applied a transfer to another university which is in countryside. The degree of depression had been remarkably alleviated. Since the workload is almost the same, healthier environment is the element that lead to a better mental health.
Admittedly, we cannot deny the fact that, a mature medical system shows its own importance when dealing with public health issues. The advanced medical system in some countries has proved its ability when dealing with urgent public health threats. Deadly flu virus H1N1 threated almost half of the earth by its high death rate and scarce treatment available. In this kind of instances, a clean environment could not offer help. However, with the established medical system, special treatment was successfully developed in less than half an month, which shows the necessity of it.
To sum up, as a means to improve public health care, both physically and mentally, a salubrious environment is the most important philosophy.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, kind of, first of all, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 43.0788530466 51% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 29.0 8.0752688172 359% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2558.0 1977.66487455 129% => OK
No of words: 467.0 407.700716846 115% => OK
Chars per words: 5.47751605996 4.8611393121 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64867537961 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96440341307 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 251.0 212.727598566 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.537473233405 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 777.6 618.680645161 126% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 12.0 3.08781362007 389% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.94265232975 223% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 20.6003584229 141% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 42.5388121023 48.9658058833 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.2068965517 100.406767564 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.1034482759 20.6045352989 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.89655172414 5.45110844103 53% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.85842293907 259% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.219784500686 0.236089414692 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0556689253382 0.076458572812 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0652856003929 0.0737576698707 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.145052563942 0.150856017488 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0757390916777 0.0645574589148 117% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.78 58.1214874552 80% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.21 10.9000537634 130% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.03 8.01818996416 113% => OK
difficult_words: 136.0 86.8835125448 157% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.