Nowadays, it is not uncommon that parents keep complaining about their kids being unable to move their eyes off the screen. Hundreds of "scientific reports" reveals the bad aspects brought about by televisions and computers, some of which are even published in professional journals. Although nobody can deny the validity of some of these researches, one can not intentionally ignore the positive outcome of screen life. After all, every coin has two sides. In my point of view, the positive ramifications of televisions overwhelm the bad impact, which is purposely exaggerated, on young people. I will delve into reasons supporting my stand as follows.
The most outstanding reason, of course, is that televisions and movies broaden man's horizon. From a single screen, one can obtain information on what is happening on the other side of the earth! Is such exposure to more information beneficial for young man? Of course! You have to admit that it is in one's teenage that he/she shape the world outlook, which determines the trajectory of his/her later life. Learning more about the world and absorbing more opinion form others, both of which can be obtained from televisions, are definitely helpful in the shaping process of the world view. A clear evidence is young people these days have more diverse occupation choices than the last generation, which is, certainly, credit to their new information resources among which television is the most convenient.
Secondly, more and more young people are getting interested in the screen life. Most of the university students have their idols or favorite television programs so that talking about such programs has become quite a popular topic, just like the English talking about the weather. As a consequence, it is never hard to make friends with someone who shares the same favorite TV show with you. On the other hand, won't that be lonely if everyone around you are talking about a movie star on whom you have no idea? I always hold the belief that young people should be open to embrace the popularities such as the televisions, making their integration into the society easier. After all, team working is the main theme of modern society.
In summary, concentrating on the bad aspects of movies and televisions are neither fair nor reasonable. I have shown many positive outcomes of screen life so that it is time to re-assess the significance of screens in our life.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 302, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...course! You have to admit that it is in ones teenage that he/she shape the world out...
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Line 3, column 327, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'she' must be used with a third-person verb: 'shapes'.
Suggestion: shapes
... that it is in ones teenage that he/she shape the world outlook, which determines the...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, look, second, secondly, so, after all, in summary, of course, such as, talking about, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2042.0 1977.66487455 103% => OK
No of words: 402.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.07960199005 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.47771567384 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79533817223 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 227.0 212.727598566 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.564676616915 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 642.6 618.680645161 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.6333526858 48.9658058833 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.473684211 100.406767564 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.1578947368 20.6045352989 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.63157894737 5.45110844103 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.18510143864 0.236089414692 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0549576905968 0.076458572812 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0507715040353 0.0737576698707 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.110202198451 0.150856017488 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0315902557901 0.0645574589148 49% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 11.7677419355 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.18 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.49 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 86.8835125448 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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