Obey the society laws is too strict, especially for teenagers.
Nowadays, we have lots of laws in our society. Every people should obey the laws if they want to have a great society without any crimes. In this way, some people believe that obey the laws is difficult for young people. From my point of view, obeying the society laws is hard for teenager since they are not mature and they are at the sensitive period as well. My arguments for these points are explained as follows.
First, youngsters do not have enough knowledge in order to understand the laws therefore they do not try to follow the laws. For example, a person who does not have a driver license does not have any permit to drive in the street since it may cause a lot of damage. However, youngsters cannot to figure out why without driver license we should not drive. In addition, teenagers think that laws are not important and do not have any impacts on their lives. Consequently, they are reluctant to follow the rules. For instance, they think that prohibiting teenager from buying alcoholic drinks, is not a significant issue. Therefore, they try to buy a bottle of beer for example.
Second, juveniles are at the delicate period. In other words, they are disobedient in this age so they do not tend to obey the rules in the society even if they know that law would be useful for them. They think that if they obey the laws, other people will think that they are a child still. As a matter of fact, most juveniles believe that being disobedient is the most important feature that they should have so as to demonstrate that they are not a little child. Furthermore, in this age most teenagers would rather do whatever they want without any attention to the rules or any advice. To give an example, if government says that students should study well instead of going to casual work, most students will certainly ignore the government comments and they may leave the high school.
All in all, from what I have discussed, these days, we witness plenty of laws in our country that people should obey them. Some people think that obeying the laws is too hard for the youth. In my opinion, is very difficult for teenagers to obey the rules because not only are they at the susceptible age but also they are immature.
- Introduce your abilities to others in order to have successful life 63
- make decision quickly or not 82
- If teachers explain advantages of subjects outside of school to their students, they will be more interested in learning about them. 68
- Tidy students who organized their room are more successful than other students 70
- Tidy students who organized their room are more successful than other students 75
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 413, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...important feature that they should have so as to demonstrate that they are not a little ...
^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, furthermore, however, if, may, second, so, still, therefore, well, as to, for example, for instance, in addition, as a matter of fact, in my opinion, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1833.0 1977.66487455 93% => OK
No of words: 399.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.59398496241 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46933824581 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.35473495935 2.67179642975 88% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.456140350877 0.524837075471 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 570.6 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.5916112806 48.9658058833 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.2857142857 100.406767564 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0 20.6045352989 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.33333333333 5.45110844103 171% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.20175312802 0.236089414692 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0791999252917 0.076458572812 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0814620927933 0.0737576698707 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.165341961102 0.150856017488 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0927489287088 0.0645574589148 144% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.7 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 58.1214874552 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.1575268817 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.34 10.9000537634 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.8 8.01818996416 85% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 86.8835125448 64% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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