One of the most challenge problems in modern society is to have the most up-to-date skills for workplace. For solving this, government decides to give all adults over the age of 25 a training course to learn new skills. Do you think it is an effective way for government to spend its money?
In today’s modern life, there always has been a contoversial subjects among governments about the notion of which way is best for spending money. In this regards, some people are of the oopinion that the governments should noy spend money for training all people over age of 25. In contrast, I personally subsceibe to the view that with training adults in a society, the government makes lots of benefits. In the following paragraphs, my reasons will be elaborated on this issue in more detail.
To begin with, governments should spend money for adults because these young people will be experts, and they will be able to improve their society. Generally speaking, when all people is trained, this societies will rely on their people to solve problems. Needless to say, experts in the crisis situation, will help the goverment to overcome peorblesms. An example drives this notion home. In developed cuntries, most of the individulas are specialists in one field of study. In my opinion, it lies behind the fact that those governments educate their residents with updated skills, resulting in developments and fostering. Had they not spended money for this situation, these societies would not have been nurtured.
Another reason is that with training people with up-dated skills, the government saves time and energy. it means that a nation withe higher education will elliminate mistakes which might be taken by people who are not well-educated. To put it in other words, employees do not waste time to reppit other’s mistakes when they know which method they should accomplish in the work sitiatin. For instance, in my workplace, there are some specialists being more capable that others. they usually help coworkers to dedicat their time more efficient and it helps us to use their skills and avoid to repeat errors several times. All in all, the more skillful employees a society have, the less determinate the governmet should pay for compensate it.
Drawing upon the reasons that I mentined above, I do believe that the governmet with training adults do not waste the money and energy. Not only does a develped country demands experts in each realm of study, but also the society dedicate time more benificial than the time which people are not familiare with updated skills.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, well, for instance, in contrast, in my opinion, in other words, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1919.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 377.0 407.700716846 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.09018567639 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4064143971 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.606213846 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 212.727598566 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.538461538462 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 585.9 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.5411435442 48.9658058833 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.0 100.406767564 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8421052632 20.6045352989 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.05263157895 5.45110844103 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.219811382497 0.236089414692 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0699691157296 0.076458572812 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0542547004483 0.0737576698707 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.133778034788 0.150856017488 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0479496758218 0.0645574589148 74% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 11.7677419355 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.24 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.52 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 86.8835125448 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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