In order to attract good students, many university should spend a lot of money in Social Network Service.
do you agree?
Nowadays, many universities utilize social network services such as facebook, twitter and blogs in order to attract predominant students. However, putting up advertisements on social network service and organizing promotional materials to post up on the internet is a costly job. Therefore, recently in many universities, whether it is worthy to invest money in social media to attract superior students have aroused heated arguments. In my point of view, universities should use their budget in upgrading their facilities rather than spending them on marketing. Spending money on social media marketing is not a very efficient option. Moreover, if student's expectations is different from reality, the reputation of the school will deteriorate.
To begin with, advertisements on social media is not very effective in attracting great students. These students not only value the courses and scholarship the universities offers, which is the main point universities promote on social media, but also consider the tradition, reputation and also the ranking of the university, which cannot be established by marketing on social networking services. For example, in Australia there is a university named University of technology Sydney. They have been keen on posting advertisements presenting the superior courses they have and massive scholarship they offer to students with superior SAT scores. However, many good students in our school did not apply for that university since it had a very bad reputation. The school ranking was low since they had bad facilities such as old research labs and equipment it had. Also, many students disliked the school and dormitory policy. Furthermore, there were not many successful graduates in the own field of studying. Therefore, looking at this case, it is wise for universities to invest money on enhancing their facilities rather than overrating themselves. If I was a good student looking for a university to learn, I may be allured by those sweet catchphrases on the internet such as "we offer 50 thousand dollar scholarship for everyone!" or "Make your dream come true in this school!" for a moment, however, after thoughtful considering, I will never choose those universities.
In addition, the school reputation will be damaged if the student's expectation on the university is different with the actual image of the school. This will further be and obstacle in enlisting talented students to the university. As an example, one of my senior in high school chose a university in Melbourne because he was impressed by the facilities it had and the courses it offered, which he found the information in the advertising material on social network. However, as soon as his freshman year commenced, he was so disappointed. What he learned was totally different from the courses offered from the booklet and there were rats and roaches in his dormitory, apparently different from what he expected from the pictures of the university. Some of my fellow students, who ranked in the top 10 in our grade changed our mind when he came to our school and shared the terrible experience he had. Universities overrating themselves on social network to attract students will eventually have negative effect, being an obstacle in recruiting good students.
In conclusion, universities should not allocate their budget for advertising in social media. It will arise several problems if the university does not have a good reputation or have superb facilities. It will not be a good way to promote their school. Moreover, it could build up a negative reputation of their school
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 59, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'students'' or 'student's'?
Suggestion: students'; student's
...chool reputation will be damaged if the students expectation on the university is differ...
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Line 7, column 319, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...up a negative reputation of their school
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, apparently, but, furthermore, however, if, look, may, moreover, so, therefore, as to, for example, in addition, in conclusion, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 75.0 52.1666666667 144% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3065.0 1977.66487455 155% => OK
No of words: 573.0 407.700716846 141% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.34904013962 4.8611393121 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.89258810929 4.48103885553 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.07900393338 2.67179642975 115% => OK
Unique words: 264.0 212.727598566 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.460732984293 0.524837075471 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 966.6 618.680645161 156% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 68.6623115803 48.9658058833 140% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.518518519 100.406767564 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2222222222 20.6045352989 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.74074074074 5.45110844103 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 3.85842293907 285% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.234045848688 0.236089414692 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0744106726545 0.076458572812 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0714700905348 0.0737576698707 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.165657236652 0.150856017488 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0791040685274 0.0645574589148 123% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 58.1214874552 72% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.75 10.9000537634 126% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.59 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 142.0 86.8835125448 163% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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