When I was young, my mom told me that I should put all my attention on my study, ignoring everything that was distractive to me. My mother always said that if I can get a good grade, then I can go to a better university and find a good job. However, I strongly believe that we should acknowledge how to manage money when we just entering middle school.
To begin with, by mastering how to manage our money, we can develop a better insight into money. If we can manage an amount of money, we can decide how to spend the money. When the people are in middle school age, because they do not have too much money to spend, they can spend it more well-regulated. For example, they might think that how to save some money so that they can buy an iPhone by themselves. By listing a save-money-plan table, they can manage how and when they spend their money. Undoubtedly, we are easier to develop a serious good habit when we are young than we become older, so we should learn how to manage money when we are young. But if we focus on other things, such as playing and studying, we are more likely to be too willful with our money when we work, which is a bad habit that may influence our daily life.
Also, we can have a sight of the market by managing money. After listing a table that how and when we spend money, we sometimes want to accelerate that process, which means we can have a part-time job to earn some money. We also can have a survey when we looking for the PT job, so we can know what the market needs. It can help us by regulating our life plan in preparing the management of our career. We can have a better major choice when we enter a university, and also a better career choice when we graduate from school. Take me as an example, because I just focused on studying when I am young, I chose a major randomly when I entered university. But I found that my major wasn't attracted me and always have trouble finding a related job. If I could know the market earlier, that would not happen.
Admittedly, children immerse themselves in playing and studying, it is not a fault but is people's instinct. However, mastering the skill that managing money is we need when the children enter the society. So, because we can have a better insight of money and the market when we are young, and its benefits to us, I believe that we should learn how to manage our money when we are young.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: wasn't
...d university. But I found that my major wasnt attracted me and always have trouble fi...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, look, may, so, then, well, for example, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 24.0 9.8082437276 245% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 31.0 11.0286738351 281% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 83.0 43.0788530466 193% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 35.0 52.1666666667 67% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1947.0 1977.66487455 98% => OK
No of words: 452.0 407.700716846 111% => OK
Chars per words: 4.30752212389 4.8611393121 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61088837703 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.38799021334 2.67179642975 89% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.426991150442 0.524837075471 81% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 617.4 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 19.0 9.59856630824 198% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.5758228875 48.9658058833 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.7142857143 100.406767564 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5238095238 20.6045352989 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.09523809524 5.45110844103 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.146373171178 0.236089414692 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0637056832115 0.076458572812 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0540051825805 0.0737576698707 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.118479459281 0.150856017488 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0569994710051 0.0645574589148 88% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.6 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.72 10.9000537634 71% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.81 8.01818996416 85% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 86.8835125448 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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