In order to become financially responsible adults, children should learn to manage their own money at young age.
In order to overcome the hustle and bustle of today’s costly lifestyle, it is essential for individuals to be able to manage their money. There has been a controversial debate among psychologists over the issue that people can become financially responsible if they learn how to spend money in their early ages. I, personally, concur with them and hold that children will achieve the ability to manage their financial resources if being taught at a young age. My viewpoint is based on quite a few reasons; two compelling ones have been elaborated upon hereunder.
To begin with, it is clear that most of the mental and intellectual characteristics of people are formed at an early age. The nature of children, like most of the raw materials in industries, is a pristine state of life, which means that it has the best capacity for gradually processing and formation. In this line of thought, children can shape their manner, behaviour, and some specific attributes with lessons they learn and experience at childhood period. Adults, on the other hand, are in the form of one processed product that their nature and features no longer can be shaped as much as children. Among these features, financial responsibility is the most considerable criteria that can be nurtured by parents. For example, children who take a determined amount of pocket money for a specified time period from their parents learn that they will encounter to critical situations of lack of money if they do not spend it aptly. In this way, when they are willing to seize something, they can buy it with the money they have saved, without petition extra money from their parents. As a result of this, this financial preoccupation at young ages can help children to become a responsible person in managing their money in the near future.
Secondly, due to have enough time from childhood to adulthood, it is the best time to experience various conditions so that people become a competent person in his or her near future. Indeed, just as it takes a lot of try and error to achieve an ideal result in an experiment, becoming a perfect person also takes time to experience. When children are given some adequate opportunities to manage his or her life situation, they will more likely to become a responsible adult. As a result of this, experiencing different financial circumstances in childhood can be effective in managing money in adulthood.
In a nutshell, having considered all the aforementioned reasons, I firmly believe that it is better for people at an early age to learn how to manage their money. This is because the nature of children is willing to form more flexible, and because childhood is the best period to experience various invulnerable circumstances for becoming a financially responsible adult.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible agreement error. The noun try seems to be countable; consider using: 'a lot of tries'.
Suggestion: a lot of tries
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Message: "Try and" is common in colloquial speech, but "'try to'" is recommended for writing.
Suggestion: try to
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, second, secondly, so, for example, as a result, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 72.0 52.1666666667 138% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2333.0 1977.66487455 118% => OK
No of words: 468.0 407.700716846 115% => OK
Chars per words: 4.98504273504 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65116196802 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90595383972 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 225.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.480769230769 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 746.1 618.680645161 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 29.1438005605 48.9658058833 60% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 129.611111111 100.406767564 129% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.0 20.6045352989 126% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.27777777778 5.45110844103 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.395026238352 0.236089414692 167% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.131280111122 0.076458572812 172% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0969877496202 0.0737576698707 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.26852014781 0.150856017488 178% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0699086562411 0.0645574589148 108% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 11.7677419355 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 58.1214874552 78% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.96 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.5 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 86.8835125448 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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