In order to succeed, it is better to be more like others than to be different from others.
An ongoing debates exist as to whether it is better to be similar with others than to be different from others in terms of success. As far as I am concern, be different from others would be better for success, because the uniqueness and creativity are always the key to success.
Admittedly, being similar with others can be the less challenge and easier way in some cases, but there is growing and intense competition in the same industry or area with increasing number of competitors who are similar with each other.
Therefore, it is really hard to stand out from crowd without enough uniqueness and creativity. My research group may be a case to this point. Last year, we discussed which research direction we should choose. Because we are major in public health research, some members of our group suggested to do some health impact assessment on air pollution, which is the hot research topic all around the world. However, there had been too many similar research about this topic and satellite data to estimate the air pollution is novel and meaningful but difficult research direction, so I suggested the latter topic. Finally, my tutor agreed with my statements according to her rich experiences.
In addition, when we had chosen the way which is different from the others, it means that no enough references or experiences can be shared by the previous studies or researchers. Therefore, we had got the really struggling time in our early study period, especially facing the new challenge every day. And our search process was much slower than our planned, then we even doubted whether our research direction we had chosen is good or not. Fortunately, we found out a new technique to solve the problems out with long-time and patient research, which makes it possible for us to publish our result to the SCI journals. From this research, we had learnt a lot like independent thinking, the skills of cleaning data and analyzing the data and the "never give up" spirits.
All in all, I firmly reckon that the people should be different from others if they want to be success. And never be afraid of failure and challenge, because there are lots of skills and experience will never be got while being similar with others.
- money reward cannot be the best way to encourage the children. 70
- Society benefits more from works of great artists than from political leaders Do you agree or disagree with this statement 43
- it is more important to read and watch news presented by people whose opinion is different from your own view 90
- In order to succeed it is better to be more like others than to be different from others 90
- some rules of societies may push too hard on the youths. 73
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 26, Rule ID: WHETHER[6]
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "as to"?
Suggestion: whether
An ongoing debates exist as to whether it is better to be similar with others ...
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Line 1, column 156, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...erms of success. As far as I am concern, be different from others would be better...
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Line 3, column 284, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'suggested doing'.
Suggestion: suggested doing
...lth research, some members of our group suggested to do some health impact assessment on air po...
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Line 3, column 430, Rule ID: MANY_NN_U[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun research seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'much similar research', 'a good deal of similar research'.
Suggestion: much similar research; a good deal of similar research
... the world. However, there had been too many similar research about this topic and satellite data to ...
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Line 5, column 12, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ever give up' spirits. All in all, I firmly reckon that the people should b...
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Line 5, column 109, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[4]
Message: The adverb 'never' is usually put after the verb 'be'.
Suggestion: be never
... others if they want to be success. And never be afraid of failure and challenge, becaus...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, however, if, may, really, so, then, therefore, while, as to, in addition, in some cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 15.1003584229 172% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1864.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 382.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.87958115183 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.42095241839 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63573438504 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.539267015707 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 567.9 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.2028746752 48.9658058833 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.5 100.406767564 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.875 20.6045352989 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.3125 5.45110844103 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.305849034676 0.236089414692 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.112215053873 0.076458572812 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.130303749163 0.0737576698707 177% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.212240750552 0.150856017488 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.15188056629 0.0645574589148 235% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 11.7677419355 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.32 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.46 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 86.8835125448 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.