Parents today are more involved in their children’s education than were parents in the past
Nowadays,it is universally acknowledged that with the development of the modern society, education gradually plays an important role in a children’s development. Some people say that parents participate more in their children’s education than those in the past. In my opinion, I argue that parents are actually less engaged in their children’s education in our society. My points and examples are given below.
First of all, parents have already been busy with their work and thus they rarely get the time to concern about their children’s education. As the competition has become more and more fierce in the modern career, whether people are allowed to stay at their workstation or not really depends on their personal intelligence. Hence everyone always leads the busy lifestyle and their life is really covered with intensive loads of work. They are unable to earn enough time to inspect their children’s study. For example, one of my classmates, John, his parents are businessmen and they are always busy and have to travel around the country for their clients. So John always stays alone at home in most of the time, he said to me that he was always responsible for his own study and grades, due to the absence of his parents, he always needs to ask his teachers for help when trapping into some problems. Hence the above example can fully prove that parents are busy and do not possess the sufficient amount of time to care for their children’s study.
Furthermore, children always prefer to obtain the assistance from their cram schools rather than those of their parents. As nowadays, the quality of the education has been improved a lot than before, everything children learn in their school has gradually become much more difficult and diversified than their parents’ knowledge. Thus more and more students prefer to receive more professional and effective education resources, thus the after-school program has become the one and only choice for them because these programs not only have the plenty amount of excellent teaching resources but can also keep pace with their schooling study. Hence all these attractive crams has already replaced parents to educate their children off-campus. For example, as we can see that nowadays lots of students has always run from their school to their after-school programs, rarely own the desire to go home directly. And we can always see that most of the top or excellent students among schools always take their own off-campus courses in the society and we can hardly discover the top students relying on their parenting at home! Hence, it can fully confirm that the role played by parents has become less significant and it is gradually replaced by these cram courses!
Admittedly, I am not saying that nowadays parents are paying less attention to their kids’ study. With the development of modern society and the improvement of the comprehensive knowledge owned by the parents, they have already raised their awareness of educating their children and the benefits behind it, but we can rarely find the real situation that parents are concerning more with their children’s education or they really behave in some appropriate and meaningful ways to accompany with their children in life! Due to the limitation of the spaces, I am unable to give more ideas, but I believe the cases above have already proven the validity of my point of view.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, furthermore, hence, if, really, so, thus, for example, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 24.0 13.8261648746 174% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 71.0 43.0788530466 165% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 80.0 52.1666666667 153% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 8.0752688172 235% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2851.0 1977.66487455 144% => OK
No of words: 563.0 407.700716846 138% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.06394316163 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.87110059796 4.48103885553 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68023534297 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 256.0 212.727598566 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.454706927176 0.524837075471 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 884.7 618.680645161 143% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 31.0 20.1344086022 154% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 131.968489037 48.9658058833 270% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 158.388888889 100.406767564 158% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.2777777778 20.6045352989 152% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.11111111111 5.45110844103 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.379701328825 0.236089414692 161% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.15875040646 0.076458572812 208% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.11962881206 0.0737576698707 162% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.280174480593 0.150856017488 186% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0660794507682 0.0645574589148 102% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.0 11.7677419355 153% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.01 58.1214874552 69% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 10.1575268817 152% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.66 10.9000537634 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.23 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 86.8835125448 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 10.0537634409 143% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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