Parents today are more involved in their children’s education than were parents in the past
With the demand of society for high-quality educational growing, the competition among people in job market become increasingly fierce. Every parent expects their children to be successful in the future, which causes a barrel of problems like the participation of parents in their children’s education. On the one hand, some of people contend that more parents begin to engage in the education of children due to some reasons. On the other hand, others asserts that less parents are able to participate in their children’s study. In my eyes, I prefer the latter notion.
To begin with, due to fierce competition in the society, every one is not willing to lose their job including parents. In order to maintain the striking performance in their work, parents have to expense vast energy and time on working to offer high-level educational resources. For instance, my friend has the situation that his parents hardly engage in his school’s project or academic study. He said once his parents attempt to guide his study and accompany him, but due to the fact that his parents at that time didn’t spend energy and time on their work so much as before, they would be kicked out the company. The example prove the fact that in order to earn money to pay their own life and children’s tuition, they have to be attentive to their work.
Moreover, with the prevalence of cram school, parents can be released from their children’s education. For one reason, the cram school is equipped with ability to provide children with academic knowledge that is more specialized than their parents can offer. Cram schools also compensate for the drawback of parents. The survey explored by SINA.com indicates that in China, almost all students have engaged in cram institutions in today because of more professional guide and questions solving. And the research also shows that the reason why their parents hardly engage in their study is that it is unnecessary for parents to take part in study.
Finally, the knowledge gap between parents and their children is so huge that most parents are not capable of participating in their children’s education since knowledge updates are so fast. Even though some parents have received high-quality education, key points parents grasp that had been taught are totally different from knowledge children mastered nowadays. There is a vivid example regarding me. Every time I request some academic questions to my parents, they always answer that they must work out. However, when seeing these questions, they found the question contains the knowledge they learned but they cannot address it.
In the nutshell, the points I proposed above totally prove my notion.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: After 'some of', you should use 'the' ('some of the people') or simply say ''some people''.
Suggestion: some of the people; some people
... children’s education. On the one hand, some of people contend that more parents begin to enga...
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Line 1, column 467, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun parents is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
... On the other hand, others asserts that less parents are able to participate in thei...
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Line 2, column 628, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'proves'.
Suggestion: proves
... be kicked out the company. The example prove the fact that in order to earn money to...
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Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...r children’s education. For one reason, the cram school is equipped with ability to prov...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ey learned but they cannot address it. In the nutshell, the points I proposed a...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, however, if, moreover, regarding, so, for instance, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 68.0 52.1666666667 130% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2261.0 1977.66487455 114% => OK
No of words: 442.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.11538461538 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58517132086 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65479879366 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.504524886878 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 691.2 618.680645161 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.8160211863 48.9658058833 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.666666667 100.406767564 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0476190476 20.6045352989 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.95238095238 5.45110844103 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.382048820973 0.236089414692 162% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.114763083387 0.076458572812 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.100811155031 0.0737576698707 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.203254777543 0.150856017488 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.113233861667 0.0645574589148 175% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 11.7677419355 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.07 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 86.8835125448 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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