In modern society, some young people have part-time jobs. I agree that part-time job is beneficial for young people. I have two reasons which I will explore in this essay.
To begin with, young people can buy what they want if they have part time job, without asking money from their parents. Most young people want to have one, but there are times when their parents did not allow it. So many young people start part-time job. For example, my friend’s parents really fastidious hence, he worked as a part-time to mark the students’ exams at the academy. As a result, he got paid to buy that what he wanted.
Secondly, working from an early age can be a good experience. High school is the best example. Usually, high schools go to college after graduation, but some high schools can get a job right after graduation. This mean, they know that it is better for schools to work from an early age.
In conclusion, having a part-time job is beneficial to started when young age. According to the passage, I agree that part-time job is beneficial for young people.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 65, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
...ple can buy what they want if they have part time job, without asking money from their pa...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, hence, if, really, second, secondly, so, for example, in conclusion, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 13.8261648746 14% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 43.0788530466 49% => OK
Preposition: 19.0 52.1666666667 36% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 893.0 1977.66487455 45% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 189.0 407.700716846 46% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.72486772487 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.70779275107 4.48103885553 83% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51445806688 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 110.0 212.727598566 52% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.582010582011 0.524837075471 111% => OK
syllable_count: 265.5 618.680645161 43% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 13.0 20.1344086022 65% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 29.6007446128 48.9658058833 60% => OK
Chars per sentence: 63.7857142857 100.406767564 64% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.5 20.6045352989 66% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.14285714286 5.45110844103 131% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.286704569852 0.236089414692 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.131398201436 0.076458572812 172% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.150099474521 0.0737576698707 204% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.222684374953 0.150856017488 148% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.13631911068 0.0645574589148 211% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.6 11.7677419355 65% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 75.2 58.1214874552 129% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.0 10.1575268817 59% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 9.5 10.9000537634 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.95 8.01818996416 87% => OK
difficult_words: 32.0 86.8835125448 37% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.2 10.0537634409 72% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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