People benefit more from traveling in their own country than from traveling to foreign countries.
Travelling is an interesting activity that can be done nationally or internationally. In my opinion, people benefit more from taking a trip in their own country than from travelling to a foreign country. I feel this way for the following reasons which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, travelling in their own country increases the horizon of learning about their country. People who tend to live in one place during their whole life which may never get a chance to admire the beauty, strength and cultural values of their own country. They travel to foreign country for all these things which is useless for a person untill they first discover the beauty of their own country. People learn a plenty of new things in their own home land. To exemplify, I was accustommed to living in a big city through my entire life however, during final year of my university I got a chance to visit the northern areas of Pakistan. It was my first time I ever visited these beautiful places. I was amazed with the beauty, the people , the land, rivers, mountains, and lakes were so beautiful and peaceful. I learned about people cultures and traditions which were very discreet from my city life. Over all it was a life changing experience for me. This would not have been possible if I have never been to those areas. I was never able to learn about the beauty and tradition of my motherland.
In addition, travelling in their own country develops patriortism in a person. When people learned about their heritage, history, and tradition it develops a sense of pride in them. Moreover, when people promote tourism locally which is strengthen the country's economy. As a result, this helps the country prosper.
In conclusion, I firmly believe that it is more advantageous for people to travel in their own country than travelling to foreign countries. This is because it increases our knowledge about our own country, and because it strengthen the economy of our homeland by promoting tourism.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, may, moreover, so, then, i feel, in addition, in conclusion, as a result, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1669.0 1977.66487455 84% => OK
No of words: 343.0 407.700716846 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.86588921283 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30351707066 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66215432377 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 212.727598566 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.498542274052 0.524837075471 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 517.5 618.680645161 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.8706861884 48.9658058833 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.45 100.406767564 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.15 20.6045352989 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.1 5.45110844103 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.440929116398 0.236089414692 187% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.142915229176 0.076458572812 187% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.1860348499 0.0737576698707 252% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.322521638906 0.150856017488 214% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0951606303109 0.0645574589148 147% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.1 11.7677419355 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.67 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.75 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 86.8835125448 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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