People living in hometowns are happier and more succesful than thos who live outside their hometowns.
Currently, with the advancement of technology, citizens are offered with multiple choices, hence some individuals choose to leave their hometowns and settle down in other metropolises. It seems that their living conditions have been significantly enhanced, however, some individuals reckon that whether the individuals living outside their hometowns are happier and more successful than those remaining in hometowns. Personally speaking, it is true that those citizens feel more delighted and achieve more success and there are a couple of reasons to account for my view.
To start with, in the metropolis, people feel more delighted for several reasons. Initially, there are people from all walks of life, thus individuals there are capable of making acquaintance with a bunch of people upholding the same interests and they can get together to share what they have read or known recently, which greatly uplifts their spirits. Meanwhile, in the metropolis, an increasing number of entertainment facilities are easily available, like museums, art exhibitions, cinemas, which enables people living there to unwind themselves and have a short break from the daily grind of work. In addition, the metropolis also enjoys a large number of newly-emerging affairs, therefore, benefiting from the access to these affairs, it is conducive for people living there to satisfy their curiosity and enlighten their moods.
What’s more, metropolis does ensure that people living there attain more achievements, which are supposed to ascribe to a lot of factors. For one thing, the economy there is highly developed, hence it lay a solid foundation for people’s success. Specifically, with the monetary source and social network resource based on the well-developed economic, it is much convenient to start up people’s own business. Meanwhile, due to the policies implemented by the authority in the metropolis, the start-up tends to enjoy the preference on them, which diminishes their burden on maintaining the well-being of a company. For the other, the metropolis is also an optical platform attracting a large number of opportunities and merchants, with the resource distributed by the people from other regions, the metropolis has witnessed an unprecedented accumulation of material affluence, thus people living there can enjoy the benefit brought by them, for instance, one of my best friends, Rebecca, is a woman who merely graduated from a top university a few months ago. Her parents had already helped her to find a position in a local corporation in their hometown, which offers Rebecca extremely low wages and probably the salary can just cover the cost of basic necessities. Conversely, Rebecca is not geared toward to go back to her hometown, where the economy in on the verge of collapse, and she eventually lands a decent job in fortune 500 due to her eminent academic performance, which guarantees her future career success. This example illuminates that on the foundation of a developed economy, people living in metropolis tend to achieve more success easily.
Admittedly, living in hometowns also has its merits. For instance, it is comfortable for us to live with parents, who care about our living, instead of living alone in the metropolis without a person accompany us to visit a doctor in case of emergency. Nevertheless, these kinds of merits are outshone by the perks the metropolis possesses due to the happiness we can obtain and the potential success derived from the foundation of the economy.
In a nutshell, people living outside there hometowns are happier and more successful than those living in hometowns.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, conversely, hence, however, if, nevertheless, so, therefore, thus, well, while, for instance, in addition, for one thing, it is true, to start with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 88.0 52.1666666667 169% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3075.0 1977.66487455 155% => OK
No of words: 574.0 407.700716846 141% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.35714285714 4.8611393121 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.89472135074 4.48103885553 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00446488355 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 294.0 212.727598566 138% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.512195121951 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 986.4 618.680645161 159% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 30.0 20.1344086022 149% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 83.4001468076 48.9658058833 170% => OK
Chars per sentence: 161.842105263 100.406767564 161% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.2105263158 20.6045352989 147% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.31578947368 5.45110844103 153% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.366530473713 0.236089414692 155% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.129823536281 0.076458572812 170% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.144815347563 0.0737576698707 196% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.282671923646 0.150856017488 187% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.173347766094 0.0645574589148 269% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.9 11.7677419355 161% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 32.57 58.1214874552 56% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 6.10430107527 213% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.2 10.1575268817 159% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.4 10.9000537634 132% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.55 8.01818996416 119% => OK
difficult_words: 161.0 86.8835125448 185% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 10.002688172 150% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.0537634409 139% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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