People today spend too much tie on personal enjoyment--doing things they like to do--rather than doing things they should do.
Nowadays, the advanced and sophisticated technologies have become part of almost all people’s lives all over the world. Most people become more addicted to these technologies, enjoy the personal activities, yet forget the essential activities and things that they should do. Thus, I agree to the extent that in this era, people spend much time in doing things less important than doing things beneficial to themselves.
To begin with, reasonable people will agree that although today’s technology really makes our life easier, it doesn’t necessarily mean that we have to spend too much time to do something insignificant, or even worthless. Personally, I believe that most people get addicted with the current technologies and spend all day long for playing games, using social media, updating photos, and so on and so forth. Take, for example, that many students do these insignificant activities relentlessly and ignore their obligations to study and do the assignments.
In addition, another salient fact on why I agree with the prompt is that the fact showing that most students were cramming prior to final test because they chose to spend their time for worthless activities in corresponding to studying. For instance, they also procrastinated their assignments and collected them to the lecturers or teachers without full responsibility and passion. Much worse, even though they know that they have educational responsibility, they choose to meet with friends in a café. Not only students do, but also other professions such as businessman, engineers, and other people also often use their time unwisely such as watching movies in a cinema too much and using social media such as instagram and facebook while they have urgent jobs to do as soon as possible.
Since most people spend too much time on personal activities, they become more inactive and less extrovert. We can see the reality that in order to communicate one another, people opt to chat their friends. In fact, communication is very essential part of life. For instance, some people even upload a photo comparing families in the past with today by depicting that today, they hold their own phone and ignore other people close to them, while families in the past look smile one another and talk directly to others.
To put it in a nutshell, in this era, people cannot prioritize the things that they should do. I agree that today’s people would rather spend their time for personal enjoyment than caring about their personal development, responsibility, and other people.
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'if', 'look', 'really', 'so', 'thus', 'while', 'for example', 'for instance', 'in addition', 'in fact', 'such as', 'to begin with']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.215932914046 0.229887763892 94% => OK
Verbs: 0.155136268344 0.158761421928 98% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0964360587002 0.0866891130778 111% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0712788259958 0.046263068375 154% => OK
Pronouns: 0.062893081761 0.0685040099705 92% => OK
Prepositions: 0.117400419287 0.118717715034 99% => OK
Participles: 0.0335429769392 0.0351676179071 95% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.88400187788 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0377358490566 0.0309702414327 122% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.062893081761 0.0887237588012 71% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0125786163522 0.0209618222197 60% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0020964360587 0.0139019557991 15% => Some subClauses wanted starting by 'Which, Who, What, Whom, Whose.....'
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2565.0 2387.08602151 107% => OK
No of words: 413.0 408.028673835 101% => OK
Chars per words: 6.21065375303 5.86048508987 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50803742585 4.48200974243 101% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.346246973366 0.338922669872 102% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.237288135593 0.251872472559 94% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.200968523002 0.174417080927 115% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.140435835351 0.112833075102 124% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88400187788 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.523002421308 0.524397521467 100% => OK
Word variations: 58.9364358007 59.2087087015 100% => OK
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6684587814 77% => OK
Sentence length: 25.8125 20.5533526081 126% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.3516990546 48.84282405 128% => OK
Chars per sentence: 160.3125 120.699889404 133% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.8125 20.5533526081 126% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.875 0.644075263715 136% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.54480286738 0% => OK
Readability: 49.5413135593 45.7405998639 108% => OK
Elegance: 1.26811594203 1.45489161554 87% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.321824400292 0.300154397459 107% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0961375551806 0.103427244359 93% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0494653032963 0.0752933317313 66% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.55095403432 0.497263757937 111% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.126212421187 0.151897553556 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.132581628251 0.114077575197 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0826887891821 0.0781384742642 106% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.375317896184 0.336927656856 111% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0234757652706 0.067059652881 35% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.224728912519 0.210909579961 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0651302635362 0.0618886996521 105% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8870967742 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.86379928315 26% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.91756272401 122% => OK
Positive topic words: 9.0 8.42114695341 107% => OK
Negative topic words: 1.0 2.4623655914 41% => OK
Neutral topic words: 5.0 2.75985663082 181% => OK
Total topic words: 15.0 13.6433691756 110% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.5 Out of 30
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