People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment, doing things they like to do rather than doing things they should do.
Needless to say, personal pleasure is of paramount importance in human being’s life. This brings up a highly controversial topic whether today people' time is allocated to personal enjoyment or necessary tasks. I believe that individuals dedicate time to doing necessary works rather enjoyable ones. The reasons for this viewpoint are related to their jobs and education which I will explain them in the following paragraphs in a great detail.
The first reason that immediately comes to mind is that people spend their time at a job. In other words, humankind dedicates time to doing their duties, performing tasks and so forth. Most of these works are really time-consuming and exhausting. People do them because of making money in order to pay their compulsory expenses such as transportation bills, accommodation expenses, and living expense. For example, my father is a secretary of a manager in a big company goes to his profession from the early morning until the evening every day. He sometimes worked overtime till the night in order to gain additional money. During his job, he has to organize meetings for his boss and type letters in the computer taking several hours to terminate them. Not only should he work as a secretary but also he is a waiter at a restaurant in our neighborhood. He has a second a job since he obtains an insufficient amount of salary from the company. Therefore, all of these practices indicate that people devote time to mandatory topics such as executing tasks on the job rather than spending on personal enjoyment.
The second point worth discussing is related to people' education. In fact, nowadays more and more people are interested in gaining an academic education. Young adults registers for universities and professional centers for the sake of obtaining a degree or diploma. The main purpose behind these educations is to find a career in the future. My own experience provides an illuminating insight into this fact. When I was an engineering student at a college, I used to go to university every day. At university, I attended in many classes to learn new things. During the lectures, our professors described new theories and notions from our textbooks and in the mid-term examinations, they presented various questions regarding the class discussion. Therefore, I should not only give a heed for the professors' talks at every class, I must but also execute class assignment after classes. Additionally, I had had professional training at a vocational center before I came to the house. This professional training was considerably tiring for me, as I had a lot of physical activities. Hence, I allocated my time and energy so that I can be recruited in the future. Consequently, university education, as well as professional training made it impossible for people to have enough time for dedicating to personal enjoyment.
In conclusion, according to above-mentioned factors, it is true that people’s modern life is much about necessary topics instead of personal enjoyment because they work a lot and learn from universities and other centers.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, hence, if, really, regarding, second, so, therefore, well, as to, for example, in addition, in conclusion, in fact, such as, as well as, in other words, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 71.0 52.1666666667 136% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2603.0 1977.66487455 132% => OK
No of words: 507.0 407.700716846 124% => OK
Chars per words: 5.13412228797 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.74517233601 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.06758178449 2.67179642975 115% => OK
Unique words: 279.0 212.727598566 131% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.550295857988 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 845.1 618.680645161 137% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.6003584229 136% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.3532235771 48.9658058833 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.9642857143 100.406767564 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.1071428571 20.6045352989 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.96428571429 5.45110844103 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 15.0 4.88709677419 307% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.183723095425 0.236089414692 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0428481133224 0.076458572812 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0554964261154 0.0737576698707 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.111570886347 0.150856017488 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0411290467598 0.0645574589148 64% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 11.7677419355 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 58.1214874552 77% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.18 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.55 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 129.0 86.8835125448 148% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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