People today spend too much on personal enjoyment doing things they like to do rather than doing things they should do.” Do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Enjoyment is one of the humanistic perceptions that a human being can experience, which would be the resultant of the way we live. I am of the opinion that It is not that people spend quite a bit of time on personal enjoyment, but that they are just gradually forming a new lifestyle in response to the new policies in society, which cannot be defined as doing things they want to avert. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, retrospectively, the desideratum of human beings was supposed to construct earth as a better place to enjoy living rather than a place to blood and war. In the modern epoch, the enjoyment concept like other concepts dramatically has changed under duress of the private owner political and economic system, the juggernaut of Capitalism. Many have forgone collective responsibility to each other and earth; in doing so, they have immersed themselves in but otherwise beneficial enjoyment. For instance, nowadays, the multitudes are paying heed all the more their physical desires and improve otherwise altruistic one. Some politicians have buckled down to devastate natural resources on earth to empower their party interests more and more to be able to defeat the other one. Under such a pernicious and diabolical manner, some have lost the humanitarian grounds, and have been engaged with selfish desire in which, the way Nicoli Makiaveli ingeniously have mentioned that "The end justifies the means," which demonstrate how relentlessly selfish desires are to become an insatiable superficial aim, having is virtue rather than being. Hence, if thought necessary at all, we are staggered in the predicament of degeneration unless we reconsider teleologically ourselves and life.
Moreover, enjoyment, as such, has several strata of quality, in which everybody has their perception of the qualia of enjoyment. Although, in the technologic era, the leading expert in social media regularly conquer the new horizon in advancing and helping humans in quotidian life, which is a great solace to our loneliness and having different experiences in connectedness with other, human in solitude ought to confront with their death. In doing so, for suppressing this insufferable anxiety, some engage themselves with the enjoyment of being now or relish the moment, and others altogether more frivolously regress to the addictive habit. However, only a few begin to relish the odyssey of knowing "thyself." Therefore, our point of view plays a significant role in the experience of enjoyment.
In conclusion, I am of the opinion that the how-to-be people's activity is not simply a do-it-yourself choice, but it is, in part, determined by macro-policy in which a person is a point in the nexus. Far from these realities, shall we have a dream in which equality and peace are realized to bring real enjoyment?
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- Educational institutions have a responsibility to dissuade students from pursuing fields of study in which they are unlikely to succeed. 83
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 1020, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , &apos
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, hence, however, if, moreover, so, therefore, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 70.0 52.1666666667 134% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2438.0 1977.66487455 123% => OK
No of words: 468.0 407.700716846 115% => OK
Chars per words: 5.2094017094 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65116196802 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.06070929897 2.67179642975 115% => OK
Unique words: 270.0 212.727598566 127% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.576923076923 0.524837075471 110% => OK
syllable_count: 783.0 618.680645161 127% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 20.1344086022 144% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 73.2076456048 48.9658058833 150% => OK
Chars per sentence: 152.375 100.406767564 152% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.25 20.6045352989 142% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.25 5.45110844103 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.18781190943 0.236089414692 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0569353525163 0.076458572812 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0667837681413 0.0737576698707 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.121339371365 0.150856017488 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0314104510307 0.0645574589148 49% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.7 11.7677419355 150% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 33.58 58.1214874552 58% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 10.1575268817 156% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.53 10.9000537634 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.83 8.01818996416 123% => OK
difficult_words: 141.0 86.8835125448 162% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.0537634409 135% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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