People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment - doing things they like to do - rather than doing things they should do."

Grammar and spelling errors:
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...be influenced by their extravagant lives .According to the following reason and my...
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... influenced by their extravagant lives .According to the following reason and my personal...
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...owing reason and my personal experiences,I firmly believe that people spend too mu...
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...her doing things they are supposed to do .I feel this way for some reasons which I...
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...r doing things they are supposed to do .I feel this way for some reasons which I ...
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...ing to explore in the following essay. First of all, In this dazzling world, pe...
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...ling world, people are easily enticed by myriad of temptations which put them in ...
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...ho was pursuing computer science course.But suddenly he changed his mind and squand...
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... his mind and squandered all his savings gambling in casinos which was really dol...
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...ing in casinos which was really doleful.If he bought that laptop for his brother,h...
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...performed well in his practical paper. Furthermore as people having ultra fast ...
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...ell in his practical paper. Furthermore as people having ultra fast life style ...
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... delicate food and beauty spot they went ,people having fixed salary try to flaunt...
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...ppy and less satisfied and sometimes it make them run by precarious whims. Let me gi...
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...le which can shed a light on this matter . My friend Joshua had a low paid job but...
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...a had a low paid job but he always tries to emulate his cousins life style who is...
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...ill make him happy and more satisfied. By the way of conclusion, although exper...
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... the way of conclusion, although experts put emphasis on that people should not ...
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...erts put emphasis on that people should not do excessive work but the actual tru...
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...tual truth is that they do have too much personal entertainment and for which peo...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, if, really, so, well, i feel, by the way, first of all, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1701.0 1977.66487455 86% => OK
No of words: 346.0 407.700716846 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.9161849711 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31289638616 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72406101873 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.606936416185 0.524837075471 116% => OK
syllable_count: 522.0 618.680645161 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 20.6003584229 49% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 34.0 20.1344086022 169% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 115.278098527 48.9658058833 235% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 170.1 100.406767564 169% => OK
Words per sentence: 34.6 20.6045352989 168% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.4 5.45110844103 172% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 21.0 5.5376344086 379% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.249742398992 0.236089414692 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0950069066221 0.076458572812 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.161407103623 0.0737576698707 219% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.220015606916 0.150856017488 146% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.196888918248 0.0645574589148 305% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.0 11.7677419355 161% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.43 58.1214874552 78% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 10.1575268817 152% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.85 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.16 8.01818996416 114% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 86.8835125448 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 10.002688172 190% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.6 10.0537634409 155% => OK
text_standard: 19.0 10.247311828 185% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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Thank you so much for evaluation.