Playing video games are wasting of time.
Almost everyone agrees that childhood is the most critical period in an individual's life. It is the period that lays the foundation of a child's future. From my perspective, I strongly disagree that computer games are considered wasting of time. I feel this way for many reasons, which I will develop in the subsequent paragraphs.
First and foremost, it is without a shadow of a doubt, computer games induces children's creativity and captures kids' attention, as a result, kids will be eager to learn more and more. On the other hand, traditional games are so boring. Actually, I have experienced an episode in my life that can relate to what I mean. I have a four years old kid, because of a terrible pandemic, COVID_19 virus, we face these days, he could not go kindergarten. Fortunately, I could download an amazing application called Khan Academy app. Khan Academy app helps him learn letters and numbers in a very interesting way. I really appreciate this application as it helped me to wisely use my kid's time.
Secondly, playing video games is pretty safer than other traditional games or sports as children can play at home and their parents can monitor them all the time, on the contrary, playing outside the house might be a little bit dangerous as they can easily get injured. My nephew's experience demonstrates this reality. Two years ago, My nephew, David, was playing football with his friends at the nearby park, accidentally, he fell in the ground and his leg got hurts. When they went to the hospital, the doctor told his parents that he had a sprained ankle and he had to stay at home for the full month. If my nephew had played at home with video games, he would not have injured and enjoy the rest of his vacation without any pain.
It can be summed up in accentuating that playing video games help using the time effectively in learning. Also, playing video games are more safer as kids would not get injured at all.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 73, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'individuals'' or 'individual's'?
Suggestion: individuals'; individual's
...dhood is the most critical period in an individuals life. It is the period that lays the fo...
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Line 5, column 219, Rule ID: LITTLE_BIT[1]
Message: Reduce redundancy by using 'little' or 'bit'.
Suggestion: little; bit
...y, playing outside the house might be a little bit dangerous as they can easily get injure...
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Line 7, column 68, Rule ID: ADVISE_VBG[5]
Message: The verb 'help' is used with infinitive: 'to use' or 'use'.
Suggestion: to use; use
...entuating that playing video games help using the time effectively in learning. Also,...
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Line 7, column 138, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'safer' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: safer
...learning. Also, playing video games are more safer as kids would not get injured at all.
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Line 7, column 149, Rule ID: COMP_THAN[3]
Message: Comparison requires 'than', not 'then' nor 'as'.
Suggestion: than
...lso, playing video games are more safer as kids would not get injured at all.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, first, if, really, second, secondly, so, i feel, i mean, as a result, on the contrary, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 52.1666666667 59% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1608.0 1977.66487455 81% => OK
No of words: 341.0 407.700716846 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.71554252199 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29722995808 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62360929576 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.589442815249 0.524837075471 112% => OK
syllable_count: 502.2 618.680645161 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.2060258572 48.9658058833 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.3333333333 100.406767564 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.9444444444 20.6045352989 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.66666666667 5.45110844103 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.318703243828 0.236089414692 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0874303457058 0.076458572812 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.118714702902 0.0737576698707 161% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.206825997211 0.150856017488 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.128609578649 0.0645574589148 199% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.1 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.0 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 86.8835125448 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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